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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-06-07 05:46 AM


Moments in life
sometimes remain
with meaning
hidden until the end.
Individuality--
pleated edge
of a hand-held fan.


A thing
becoming--
unrealized...
until unfolding of the whole.
A plan
too cunning
for surmise--
reveals philosophy of stone.



Creation...
then
and only
then
is purpose
actualized...
we must
be bent
to capture wind--
mimicking
the grace of sky.


Just like paper
creased in folds
bent in molds
in lines of pleat
river creeks
in boast of gold
veins that toast
prosperity
within our fingers
we grasp peace
and try to catch
eternity.
(as if we ever had a choice)
I'm sure
if paper had a voice,
we'd hear protest
of life's crimping--
drowning choir
of angel's sing.


Just like people
unaware
scissored into
transformation--
we would hear a paper's sigh
with ink of lamentation...


weary of--
in fear of love--
rebuking
our salvation.


[This message has been edited by serenity (06-07-2002 06:11 AM).]

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JamesMichael
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1 posted 2002-06-07 05:52 AM


Enjoyed this serenity..James
Gentle Spirit
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2 posted 2002-06-07 06:19 AM


within our fingers
we grasp peace
and try to catch
eternity.
(as if we ever had a choice)


I've said it before, and I'll say it again.....man when you write, there is no stopping ya!!  These lines just grabbed me, wonderful lines!!

Like a red brick,
in a white wall
somebodies brush
forgot to paint...
lonely....(as sung by Tracy Lawrence..)


ethome
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since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada
3 posted 2002-06-07 06:27 AM


                                          "A thing
                                         becoming--
                                         unrealized...
                                   until unfolding of the whole.
                                           A plan
                                         too cunning
                                         for surmise--
                                   reveals philosophy of stone."

Yep! You one smart cookie Celeste!
What's wrong with being a little mellow and accepting later in life? Kinda nice ain't it?

Janet Marie
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Posts 18554

4 posted 2002-06-07 07:36 AM


I'm sure
if paper had a voice,
we'd hear protest
of life's crimping--
drowning choir
of angel's sing.
Just like people
unaware
scissored into
transformation--
we would hear a paper's sigh
with ink of lamentation...

===================================


stoned on poetry
you do know how cool this is right?
the paper metaphor and analogy is brilliant..you took it to extended metaphor and played its theme to poetic perfection.


Individuality--
pleated edge
of a hand-held fan.



how cool is that!!

Scissors, rock, paper...yeah...I get it

oh and paper does sigh..poetry allows it to breathe...and I DO INHALE
YOU ROCK me twin

When man is lead to arrogance, poetry reminds him of his limitations
When mans concern narrows, poetry reminds him the diversity of existence

JFK

Seymour Tabin
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Tamarac Fla
5 posted 2002-06-07 07:51 AM


Serenity,
I dubble on JM's answer. Excellent write.

bags123
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6 posted 2002-06-07 08:50 AM


Me three! Very cool.
Enchantress
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Canada eh.
7 posted 2002-06-07 09:14 AM


Just like people
unaware
scissored into
transformation--
we would hear a paper's sigh
with ink of lamentation...
----------------------------
Enjoyed this one oh so much serenity!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

serenity blaze
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8 posted 2002-06-07 02:09 PM


grinning---I was WONDERING who would get the scissors, rock, paper thing!!! cracking up at Jan, NO FAIR---yer in my head already!

thanks all! this was fun...thanks so much for your kindness and generosity to continue to read my craziness! Love you all!

Sven
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9 posted 2002-06-07 04:24 PM


craziness eh??

well. . . perhaps. . . but, perhaps not. . . I'll still reading. . .

-----------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

EarthenSoul
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since 2002-05-30
Posts 163
WA, USA
10 posted 2002-06-07 05:51 PM


Absolutely beautiful.  Very inspiring!  Full of so many perfect lines, I couldn't choose a favorite.  
Duncan
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11 posted 2002-06-07 09:12 PM


weary of--
in fear of love--
rebuking
our salvation.


Yep.

Madame Chipmunk
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since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296
Michigan
12 posted 2002-06-07 09:17 PM


if paper had a voice,
we'd hear protest
of life's crimping--
drowning choir
of angel's sing.

I often wonder if inanimate objects can feel and think....this poem really provoked my thoughts on the subject again...
A great write, Karen.

~ philosophical hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

Skyfire
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Riding
13 posted 2002-06-07 10:24 PM


Well done
Severn
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14 posted 2002-06-08 07:51 PM


er..no spanking today midi-K

I love the last four lines the most. I know that all too well....sigh..

huggles you - a damn fine poem..

K

bsquirrel
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15 posted 2002-06-09 03:00 AM


Cool, that makes me a paper doll in a chain of dolls. Ah ... don't staple me in the neck? What the (   ) are you doing? OWWWW!

She said burn ... together.
-TON

serenity blaze
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Posts 27738

16 posted 2002-06-09 05:00 AM


funny, this--is what catches my own eye...sigh of sighs...

"Creation...
then
and only
then
is purpose
actualized...
we must
be bent
to capture wind--
mimicking
the grace of sky."

but? I exit--gladly
that so many take a disparity of me--
I think I LIKE that!

YER LOVELY, all..

(serenity exits, doing the 'soft-shoe'...)



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