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Million Dollar Smile
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Million Dollar Smile |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Hundred dollar walk, million dollar smile walking down the street, strutting down the mile Legs from heaven that reach out to the stars Goddess from Venus traveling to Mars I thought my eyes had seen the heavens bright But man, oh man, this dame was quite a sight I swear the clocks have gone to overdrive and traffic stands still as those legs do stride Her clothes the finest I have seen...I tell on curves defined so elegantly well Silk shoulders, moist lips, gentle swaying hips With maybe eyes that stare a heart to skips If I can catch her as she struts along I’ll be a keeper as I sing my song But shoot, I can not walk any faster Those legs have caused a traffic disaster [This message has been edited by Magnus (06-06-2002 06:56 PM).] |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy THIS IS SUPERB, truly awesome, okay yes I say that about them all, but this particular one is mega special. I know you’re unaware of the effect your writing has on the reader. Maybe not but I don’t believe you know how special it is Anyway back to the subject matter and this poem, again, reading your work is a journey, and a trip that actually starts at one point and ends at another. It doesn’t ramble all over the place, having no direction and no idea of what it should be saying. That’s not to say all poems need to end up in a different place than they began because they don’t, you can have a circle poem, but it does have to move progressively. Or so I learnt when we studied creative writing YOURS ALWAYS DO which is what makes them great pieces of poetic art. Now I’ll shut up, except to say this is utterly utterly divine.   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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RosePetal
since 2001-08-26
Posts 2985South Florida |
So nice of you to write a poem about ME lol just kidding  I love the title and your discriptions! The first stanza is excellent my friend! I'm sure when she catches a glimpse of you she will slow down and drool over u a bit. |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry You need to watch where you're going, sounds like you have already fallen.  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy...dear darling girl...IF you don't run out of ink with all of the words you put in your replies....I will be amazed.. Thank You....again and again and again... Joanna, How did you know??? Darn, now the secret is out... Martie....I skinned one knee, both elbows, broke my glasses cause they were fogged over from my heated breath...and there she went.. on down the street....(Thinking of a Johnny Cash song).....oooops...Roy Orbison, I think... See...she has me all flustered.... [This message has been edited by Magnus (06-06-2002 07:58 PM).] |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
 ...I'll bet she's someone evenwomen would appreciate! Just in order to watch the men salivate! |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
LOL@Sunshine! Way cool write Barry! Thanks for the much needed and appreciated smile!! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Oh Sun, you are just tooooo much... Martie said I fell....Well, it wasn't my toe that I tripped over...It was my tongue... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy, happy to put a smile on that enchanting face...BTW...she was wearing White Shoulders. So there!!!! |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (giggles in delight) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo cute, sweet friend, aw, Traafic Copter #9 Reporting, we've got a huge mess down here, we're reporting a sight of long legs reflecting sunglare, it's causing big congestion downtown! LOL! This is delightful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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