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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast 
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you took me for walks said I was your seeing eye man and you loved the leash of my strings when they tangled you when we were closed eyes talking we went to danger places got there front row early and were the last to leave we made sure we knew all the bad that could happen to us together you were my mistress god you lead me down your daylight street and laughed at how I pulled you too fast for your lady but your woman wanted faster you promised me dog gone never I was your lap toy panting we howl spoke our sensations when moon noise listened quiet we chased love cars in dark alleys and made their window tires wet ©Dark |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Ah...good I got here front row early... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
A very nice metaphorical presentation. An animilistic approach....hummm are you that way always.....naw seriously, just a real nice read! |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms sunshine good morning lady, me too, (got here early) thanks for the read and the smile ethome, thanks for the review..enjoy your comments much, |
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Soleil Noir Senior Member
since 2001-12-19
Posts 688USA |
the streets are missing the click of our heels.... |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Hi DS Enjoyed the metaphor...and the way you used it throughout, especially, "you promised me dog gone never". Smokey wave across the valley. |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
DS darling boy, this is one of your finest writes ever it shines like a rare and exquisite jewel dropped from a dragon’s hoard into a dessert of sand. It literally illumines the page with wonder. Do you realise just how good a writer you are? Whether you are travelling the spirit ways of your soul, or tripping lightly over the stepping stones of your mind, you excel. Absolutely perfect flow, I love it, utterly utterly excellent writing.    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger That's what happens when you forget your cane |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms noir, your bare feet whisper there I hear them speak softly thanks ms ms martie, thanks lady friend, slow hugs through the smoke...(whoops) marsha, you are such a treat to my words, you make them tingle with smiles , thanks much sy, forgot? nah, I threw it away on purpose, thanks my friend |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Dark~ sorry came in late.. will you please start again..? ~hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
sultry and lush, D. Cor |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
DarkStranger~ 'I go out walking ... after midnight'~ Loved the word-braille of this one~ I let my feelings do the walking~  *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
enchantress, you are always on time, please let me start now. thanks lady friend for the read. Cor' that spounds saxy when you slay it, but I am nut a salty lush, I don't drinkin eva anypore flanks mzzz (wink) Marge, thanks for the peek in ms, you are sweet with the eye waves |
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Corinne Member Ascendant
since 1999-10-28
Posts 5167state of confusion |
not that kind of lush, silly boy! I know you know what I mean. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (sigh) Whoooops, sorry, I came in late too because of a huge traffic jam, is there a matinee scheduled? (big hugggssssss) This is a wonderful lovely and passionate poem, sweet friend, you always grace these pages with sincere and comely words of love, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
cor, thanks for the wave again (grin) noah, thanks my friend |
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