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Sunshine
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0 posted 2002-06-03 11:21 PM



Gift of Hand

Palm up, take my hand
for this promise of dreams grand
entwine then our hands

and if you were
to believe in me,
what treasures will
we uncover…

like Adam and Eve
anew to sense
of love’s first kiss
would we know then
Eden’s bliss…

all gifts I would grant to you
for I see pleasure in
your smile, I see
walks of many
miles, I see
fantasy

in the gifts I
give to thee

bless me by your
smile, take me in
your embrace,
grant me a kiss of
you, from your
princely face

thus is your gift
you give to me
tender touch of hand
strength in tender, love’s command
merciful, love’s touch


chide me not for
these my dreams
but carry me forth
on tides of beam,
bear me up to bluest cloud,
transport me to
land of proud

for you would have
my all of me,
this I give you,
most graciously,
cans’t thou see
this truth of me
in these thy words of
love

Ah my dear, dear heart,
come and take
my hand, ‘tis reaching
for you, cross this
chasm wide
nay I cannot hide
these smiling lips
nor not feel thee with
these fingertips

when
palm up, take mine hand
for a promise of dream, grand
love, forever, stands



29 December 00
Revised
©Karilea Rilling Jungel
3 June 2002

© Copyright 2002 Karilea Rilling Jungel - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-06-03 11:43 PM


OK! I'm convinced!! I will! I will!!

er, I mean, nice poem, Sunshine

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2 posted 2002-06-03 11:58 PM


and if you were
to believe in me,
what treasures will
we uncover…

like Adam and Eve
anew to sense
of love’s first kiss
would we know then
Eden’s bliss…

Well now, 'damn' just doesn't seem like enough to say.  Sure found this perfect tonight.  Don't ya love it when that happens?


I'm falling even more in love with you
Letting go of all I've held onto

Lifehouse

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3 posted 2002-06-03 11:59 PM


Very nice poem, Sunshine!
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4 posted 2002-06-04 12:07 PM


Kari darling heart sister I’m almost speechless with utter awe you have no idea how this spoke to my soul. THIS is exceptional, your writing is always superb but this is something truly awesome.

While I’m waiting to get my breath back I’ll send you a dazzling smile and just so you know I utterly utterly love this

this I give you,
most graciously,
cans’t thou see
this truth of me
in these thy words of
love

Ah my dear, dear heart,
come and take
my hand, ‘tis reaching
for you, cross this
chasm wide
nay I cannot hide
these smiling lips
nor not feel thee with
these fingertips


The whole poem is incredible in it’s perfect construction form and language usage, but these particular lines make my soul weep for joy, they are gorgeous. IWIHWT and how much I know that I never could, you are truly the mistress of this style of wonder, thank you for writing this. It’s utterly utterly perfect

You do know I love this don’t you? I thought you probably did.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy



Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Dark Stranger
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5 posted 2002-06-04 06:02 AM


sunshine
this work is lovely romantica
guess it is what we all dream of
enjoyed it much

Kit McCallum
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6 posted 2002-06-04 07:21 AM


"nay I cannot hide
these smiling lips
nor not feel thee with
these fingertips"

Just lovely Karilea! I especially love the line I quoted above ...   Sigh ....

Wonderful flow and sentiments, much enjoyed!

Best wishes,
/Kit

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7 posted 2002-06-04 09:08 AM


Ooooh Karilea...
What a wonderful piece to wake up to today!
This is magnificent...a keeper...!
I feel as though I would like to pick it up and give it a hug.
I know you understand what I'm trying to say.
Dang this is SO good!!
~Hugs YOU~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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8 posted 2002-06-04 10:12 AM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, this is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, I just love the gorgeous words of love you write, I long to feel the hand of the girl I love so so much so I can feel this magic you weave so well! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karilea, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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9 posted 2002-06-04 11:03 AM


W8!  Don't choose Michael, yet.  I have a proposition
This is absolutely gong into my library right now!
Truly one of your better works

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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10 posted 2002-06-04 11:52 AM


Sunshine, this is amazingly wonderful! Great write! Love it!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

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11 posted 2002-06-04 01:47 PM


               "for you would have
                my all of me,
                this I give you,
                most graciously,
                cans’t thou see
                this truth of me
                in these thy words of
                love

                Ah my dear, dear heart,
                come and take
                my hand, ‘tis reaching
                for you, cross this
                chasm wide
                nay I cannot hide
                these smiling lips
                nor not feel thee with
                these fingertips

                when
                                   palm up, take mine hand
                                 for a promise of dream, grand
                                     love, forever, stands"

Wow what a romantic spiritual gem this is!

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12 posted 2002-06-04 02:29 PM


Now you got me started....

Beautiful poem...YEP!  It surely is....

This gift of hand, a treasure’s touch
Soft tendrils sleek, once taking such
To hold once light, to leave a kiss
to grasp at night, in mome’ of bliss

From one a spark, electric fire
to one to feel, flame of desire
In reach of tips so warm, so soft
This gift of hand from lover’s loft

ShadowRider
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13 posted 2002-06-04 09:52 PM


No gift was ever offered
palms down
so i offer a gift of friendship
with palms up


spiritually perfect, Sunshine.
the verse breaks added something...nodding

*smiles* jeff

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14 posted 2002-06-04 10:30 PM


chide me not for
these my dreams
but carry me forth
on tides of beam,
bear me up to bluest cloud,
transport me to
land of proud

beautiful writing, Karilea...

~ loving hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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15 posted 2002-06-05 04:00 PM


for you would have
my all of me,
this I give you,
most graciously,

I read this yesterday, but was hurried... so I came back to savor it today. *S* This is beautiful and tender, Sunshine... so very lovely.

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16 posted 2002-06-05 04:27 PM


oh WOW this is stunning Karilea...one for my library for sure. Glad I was able to read this beauty, thank you for sharing.

((hugs))
Charisma

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17 posted 2002-06-05 04:28 PM


oooops forgot the thread...

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