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Corinne
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0 posted 2002-06-02 11:38 PM


When You Rain

Logic should tell me
you no longer exist,
at least not within my orbit;

and I do still recall a gray morning
when you pushed off in a rowboat,
away
from our private bay,
with wind-whipped hair
and hurt eyes.

Still, I stand on the dock’s end
when clouds
are a certain shape and hue
and the rain falls horizontally;
all elements merging,
deja vu.


© 2002 CM Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (06-03-2002 11:21 AM).]

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ecrivan
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1 posted 2002-06-03 12:25 PM


much appreciated...the imagery that is.


baerlon
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2 posted 2002-06-03 01:29 AM


everyday i am reminded of what i lost, this speaks alot of what i feel.  :-(

There's a peace inside us all
Let it be your friend
It will help you carry on
In the end
There's a peace inside us all
-Creed

Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-06-03 07:54 AM


I would have been on the harley
and the pipes would have messed up your hair
and I wouldn't have heard you screaming
those naughty things after me

(grin)  enjoy the slices you share ms Cor

Corinne
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4 posted 2002-06-03 11:22 AM


Thanks, ecrivan and baerlon.

Dark one - ahh, but you aren't from the past,
are you?

Cor

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5 posted 2002-06-03 08:29 PM




(big hugggssssss) Oh Corinne, this sounds so very sad, sweet friend, I hope everything is alright, for my heart goes out to all who experience losses! (sigh) This is heartachingly beautiful, sweet friend, God Bless You, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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6 posted 2002-06-03 11:01 PM


your words are as soft as a loud rower, m'lady.....this is exceptional
Sunshine
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7 posted 2002-06-03 11:02 PM



I do enjoy deja vu writes...
you didja best...

Cirrus
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8 posted 2002-06-04 01:33 AM


This I like, very much.

enjoyed

Sven
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9 posted 2002-06-04 04:23 PM


all over. . .

you know, I love the way that your mind works. . .

----------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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10 posted 2002-06-04 05:49 PM


Been there...done that....know the feelings
of this..

Beautifully expressed Corinne

Marge Tindal
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11 posted 2002-06-04 05:54 PM


Corinne~

'I do still recall a gray morning
when you pushed off in a rowboat,
away
from our private bay,
with wind-whipped hair
and hurt eyes.

Still, I stand on the dock’s end
when clouds
are a certain shape and hue
and the rain falls horizontally;
all elements merging,
deja vu.'


You puddled me with a remember of my own~
Thank you~

This is a gentle rain~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
         noles1@totcon.com                    

Corinne
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12 posted 2002-06-04 06:18 PM


Thanks, Noah, 'Deer, Sunshine, Cirrus, Sven (like the way your's works too), Magnus and Marge!

Cor

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