awaiting the wrath of Mars...(repost...and a long read too)

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serenity blaze
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0 posted 2002-06-01 05:38 PM

I write these words with trembling hand--
remembering times I summoned Gods.
A challenge, now, from ecrivan--
so warily I called Nimrod:
"I pray you grant me cunning, Sir--
the keen of eye and stealth of foot--
lend to me a draught of strength
and courage to do what I should."
"You have the fearlessness of child."
Surprisingly, his voice was mild.
"Tell me then, what is your prey
that makes you carry on this way?"
Defiantly, I raised my chin,
but wavered voice betrayed chagrin.
"I do not know what I long for,
but I must hunt the God of War."
"You must be weary of your life--
it's not enough that you know Strife?,
nurtured by the vile Discord--
you ask for that you ill afford!"
I lowered eyes and studied floor.
"I do not wish to embrace War--
yet should I be denied my stay--
I swear that I'll die anyway!"
"You are brave, but most unwise.
Go then, child, to your demise."
As all the stars of heaven cried,
I shuddered as Orion sighed.
Muttering, he waved one arm,
"Strength can't keep you safe from harm."
*
Thus I withdrew to Hermit's cave.
I fasted there for forty days.
With bloodied hands, I dug my grave,
and prayed my sins would be forgave.
I cleansed myself through salt of tears,
as one by one, I battled fears.
I had to first survive the Hell,
and slay the demons birthed by self.
I watched the sky as planets moved.
I gathered herb. I hummed The Tune
of Summoning--I could not sing--
until I felt the quickening.
*     *
Incantation knows not pen.
Words in whispers must be kept.
but know that some Gods' names are sung,
while other names of Gods are wept.
Forgive the silence of my ink.
I cannot tell you--you must think--
the rule of rite of summoning--
repose~realized~remembering...
*     *     *
Thus came the dusk, night 'thirty-nine,'
I felt the need of fire's heat.
I gathered rowan from the field.
I bundled twigs, encircling me.
Around the raging eye of oak
and sandalwood of heady smoke--
I wailed as labor pain began--
I wept his name in love's recant.
I called him, Ares, of the Greek--
scorned the Roman Mars as meek,
boasting that I danced on grave
and all the world was finally saved
from Panic, Trembling and Terror.
The sons of War, enslaved forever.
His minions now were mine--by whim--
into the night, I laughed at him.
Thereupon, the ground did split,
and I fell deep into the Pit.
Scenes of rape and riotry,
crimes of war and bigotry--
the taste of bile rose in my throat--
and I collapsed before his throne.
*     *
"WHO DOES DARE TO CALL ON ME?
A poet? writing poetry?
She calls herself serenity!
Cute." He snarled derisively.
"Let her burn.
She's a disgrace.
Let her scream
for sin of haste."
*
I did the only thing I knew--
I wailed to him--"But I love you!
I gladly gave up light of stars
to gaze upon the face of Mars.
You are the mighty son of Zeus!
I betrothe myself to you.
I offer love as sacrifice.
I stand before you, trembling bride.
For you, I would die willingly,
but first, I pray, you lay with me..."
*     *

I looked into his blue-flamed eyes--
and he smiled to my surprise.
"What a cunning bit of wile--
you are indeed a wicked child!
How did you know what I long for?
Alas, I can't make love and war.
But would I could, I'd make you wife,
but never shall I betray Strife."
"You've pleased me, so I'll let you go,
but no one else must ever know
that on the Earth was moment's peace
when God of War showed his mercy."
*     *     *
I penned these words
by light of stars:
"serenity
dares wrath of Mars..."
*     *
Orion writes across the sky
in twinkled script--he winks--"nice try."
*

[This message has been edited by serenity (06-02-2002 06:24 AM).]

Poet deVine

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1 posted 2002-06-01 06:21 PM

Oh!! My favorite one of yours..defiant and saucy..just like YOU.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.

2 posted 2002-06-01 06:48 PM

serenity~OHMYGAWD!!! This is incredible!!
You say it's a long read but I did not want it to end!
Now I have a favourite from you for my library!
This is...well, it's just amazing!!
Thanks for reposting.
~Hugs~

Madame Chipmunk
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3 posted 2002-06-01 07:04 PM

This is UNBELIEVABLY good, Karen...it was like reading an epic...think Rubayat of Omar Kihyam (not sure of spelling)
It is an honor to have you amongst us...

~ epic hugs!

Lyra

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"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

serenity blaze
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4 posted 2002-06-02 12:05 PM

Thank you, sisters three! I knew Jan read, and Sharon...but? yanno what? sometimes I write something I LIKE...and thank you, Enchantress and MC...I don't feel like such a nut for reposting this...

hugs.

Janet Marie
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5 posted 2002-06-02 11:23 AM

my time is not my own this weekend...and I am very behind in here....*sigh*

HAD I seen this go up I would have fussed at you for putting the "warning" that this "is long" in the title.

Did Poe and Shakes have to justify the length of their work?????

methinks NOT...

Internet attention spans should not be an issue or concern when we write or post, when it become so...things like inspiration and spontanaity and muse innocence is lost.....and I'll shut up now...cuz you know how i feel about this topic of "long reads" and most of all you know how I feel about this poem..
anyone who misses it just because they wont take the time to read it....its their loss...
and it is a poetic loss.

*jumping off of soapbox*

forgive me for using your thread to moth rant...

this write ROCKS!!

Cant stand up for fallin apart
Cant see through this veil across my heart, over you-
Youll always be the one.
You were the first, youll be the last

ethome
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6 posted 2002-06-02 11:29 AM

Inspired epic write.....pure pleasure to read throughout.....exceptionally good!

Shortest poem I've written....

Celeste is
the best.

Logan
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7 posted 2002-06-02 12:25 PM

Long? Ahh, gentle one, when you write, it is never long enough. Excellent, but then, that never surprises me..very gentle smile

Sunshine

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8 posted 2002-06-02 12:34 PM

It's a reader's Keeper...
thank you, Serene One...

Tracey
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9 posted 2002-06-02 11:24 PM

Wow, this is a heckuva read Karen. I agree with JM…this piece ROCKS. I always like your poetry, but I think this is indeed my favourite.

Everything is possible in the game of life
(Simple Minds-Promised You a Miracle)

serenity blaze
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10 posted 2002-06-04 12:24 PM

I wanted to thank those who read this the first time and remembered--and? express my gratitude to all who took the time to read. This one is kinda dear to my heart for some reason...have you ever gotten "lost" while writing? smile...this was a VACATION for me...I simply went somewhere else while writing. So? thank you, altho, I should, once again, thank ecrivan, as he was the catalyst for my foray into na-na land....

to forum.

icebox
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11 posted 2006-01-25 12:21 PM

*laugh*

Always be careful of that for which you ask!

Mysteria

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12 posted 2006-01-25 05:00 PM

What a great story and rhyme it was too and not long enough! I love it when you rhyme devine.

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