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Nicole
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since 1999-06-23
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0 posted 2002-06-01 04:49 PM


I'm in a mood today.

Tell me about 'I miss you'
as time flits by.  Hours are seconds that
keep calling me back - yanking
each skien of the fate I preordained.
Make-shift smiles hide me
even though the cracks betray me...
Belie my very intentions!
All I wanted was your happiness, but somehow that
centralized around my desires.  I
kept telling myself it was meant to be, though
time has a way of proving you wrong.
Oh but no - no, now is not the
time for again, 'cause I'll just be me - again.
How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?
Even still, I look forward to this now-step
not looking back, lest I fall into then - again.


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Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-06-01 04:54 PM



I have "moods" now and then, too...
but you "do" yours so well!

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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2 posted 2002-06-01 05:19 PM


Moods well portrayed through your words here......
And this is the capper.....
                "How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?
                 Even still, I look forward to this now-step
                 not looking back, lest I fall into then - again."
Oh how easy it is to fall into used to be....but that's where it remains, perfect or not, somewhere between was and then.

Good write!

vandana
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3 posted 2002-06-01 06:24 PM


good read
Christopher
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4 posted 2002-06-02 05:05 PM


"How can now be good, when 'was'...was perfect?"

a very valid question... one that makes me think back on something you mentioned in my last poem regarding static/malleable memories...

BOL you.

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