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Your Heart Against My Pain
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Your Heart Against My Pain |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada 
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I thought that it could never happen that I'd wince to hear you call my name, but your heart has gone frigid, and your mind resolves the same. But love, true love, other than Hallmark your pretense to refrain, other than devotion to your hidden stains, other than spilled words and false gains, has called your name again, in vain as you shield your heart against my pain. The standards in your morals book where you quote your rules of blame, you say have made you what you are to date as you climb your walls of praise. Oh but love, true love other than the prenup that you staged, other than the treasures in your cage, other than deception you engage, has called your name again, in vain as you shield your heart against my pain. High up above love's wilderness like a vulture searching for it's prey you cruised above my injured heart, til you swooped my spirit away. When love, true love other than your distance from soul's gate other than your filter for life's grace, other than your patsy for your taste, has called your name again, in vain, as you shield your heart against my pain. I leave you fat and mitigating your own conscience to your claims I'll wander lost through this abyss as I journey from your halls of pain, But love, true love other than your fancy for disdain other than your avarice mind inflamed other than your footstool on my veins has called your name again, in vain as you shield your heart against my pain! I'll find no bandage nor any cure beneath the sun or silvery moon so I'll lie upon the shores of hope once more and pray the tides of love will reach me soon. The role of poetry is to utter the un-utterable; to open up spaces of consciousness and resistance; to language oppressions; to re-language historie [This message has been edited by ethome (05-31-2002 11:04 AM).] |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
ethome, sounds as if you are waiting for the tide, you know what they say time and tide wait for no man so why wait for them. I loved the rhythm of this. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Eric "as you shield your heart against my pain"...What a great line! and after all..hope remains. Very glad for that last stanza in this sad love story. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Wow, what a sad and emotional ride here. I liked the last stanza best also. Sandra |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
very sad.... I can relate to this pain well hope all is well ~~ Connie ~~ |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssssss) Oh Eric, this is so very sad, I believe that in love no one should ever shield ones heart from anothers pleas and cries for help, for love is meant to console another in compassion, unless it is incessant then love cannot help anymore! (sigh) My heart cries out to yours, sweet friend, this is sooooooo heartwrenchingly beautiful, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Eric, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Very interesting...James |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
And may the tide come rushing in, and plant a kiss on the shores....of your heart. Hehe, I borrowed that idea from an old, old song. Best to let that lady's heart wash up on some other distant shore. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Sounds like you're on the right track already, all we can do is wait it out... great things come to those who wait. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks Keth for the comments gald you came in!! Martie I'm glad you liked the theme line.....much appreciated!! Hi Catalinamoon.....thanks for seeing the hope at the end of the tunnel! Zinsser...all is well I was just trying to reach some different plateaus through an ancient sadness! Thanks for your thoughts! Noah...Thank you so much for the wonderful kind words! James good to hear from you! Midnite...I don't care where you borrowed it from it was a sweet reply and I thank you!! Hey T Kyss I'll wait it out with the patience of a poet! Thanks for the comment!! |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
This is a fantastic poem, Eric so I'll lie upon the shores of hope once more and pray the tides of love will reach me soon. but if you don't look for love, thats when it will find you. I think I must have written the book on that because it has happened to me TWICE.  ~hopeful hugs for youLyra |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Thanks MC I really appreciate those thoughts!! You're right it happens when you least expect it! |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
So Guitar Man...is it a song or what? I think it needs to be a song... What? It already is?  I thought so... |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
OK song you win..... Sunshine came softly to my post today....da da da......thanks! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
And through the loss comes the hope. Amazing how resilient we are, in the end. I like this Ethome - only thing I didn't like was the ! on the last pain. I've never liked !'s in poems though...I prefer to let the words speak for themselves... I enjoyed this journey...  K |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
E~ this is beautiful...and so full of sadness...but the beauty is what comes shining through...as always wonderful work from your pen...you make me *sigh*. great to see you. take care. amy  "you can't stop |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
As I return to read another of your well written works, caught in my throat the emotions pouring forth. The best medicine, either in honor or in spite is to live well and bask on the shores of hope. ThisDiamond |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Eric, this is beautiful, sad, yet beautiful! If it is not a song, it sure should be! Well done, ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Severn Yes, we are resilient! Thanks for the comments, much appreciated! I don't know why that exclamation mark is even there....a type o on my part I guess! I'm a terrible two fingered typist......Thanks again. Amy I'm glad you enjoyed the emotion of this one......There's always sunshine after rain so we keep on!! Hey TD I have to agree on the shores of hope there's always a chance to try try again! Thanks for the nice thoughts! Enchantress...Yes, I guess it could be a song.....Sunshine thinks so too.....maybe, just maybe I'll have to make it one!! Thanks for the kind thoughts much appreciated! |
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