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Magnus
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0 posted 2002-05-31 09:32 AM


In the shimmer of a dream’s mome’
or the parsec of life’s beat.
Where flowers eternally bloom
in the soil, warm under feet.

Through the toils of lasting light
or the smiles once bright
Where the burdens come to be
ever less, once lightly.

As the dream takes to flight
when the heart beats light
or the slumber says softly
in whispers, meaningfully.

Take the hand of comfort close
into the bosom of thy soul
Lest it be of not what chose
in ring of bell, toll to be

Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view
before the dawn, and moon of new
Softly take me within your hold
tell again, those words...once told

I intentionally didn’t make the meter right...
This just fell from my moment...

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-05-31 09:42 AM


...and it fell perfectly.  I really enjoy your writing, Magnus.  It's obvious there's some Carolina in you.  

~SM

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2 posted 2002-05-31 09:17 PM


quote:
Take the hand of comfort close
into the bosom of thy soul
Lest it be of not what chose
in ring of bell, toll to be

Yes...
yes...

Marge Tindal
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3 posted 2002-05-31 09:20 PM


Magnus~

'Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view
before the dawn, and moon of new
Softly take me within your hold
tell again, those words...once told'


*sighs* from Florida~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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4 posted 2002-05-31 09:25 PM




BRAVO!!! This is wonderful, sweet friend, I too could feel the breeze of the Atlantic reading this and watching magnolias bloom in these soft words! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all loove you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-05-31 09:35 PM


"I intentionally didn’t make the meter right...
This just fell from my moment..."
Not to worry about meter...Barry...this is wonderful!
YES!! Big sighs!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

ethome
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6 posted 2002-05-31 09:57 PM


Nice moment you had Magnus!  Some good work came out of it!
Like this......
                       "Grace mine eyes of beauty’s view
                         before the dawn, and moon of new
                          Softly take me within your hold
                         tell again, those words...once told"
Those moments make it all worth it!

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7 posted 2002-05-31 10:40 PM


Magnus darling boy your writing is without doubt so incredibly moving, it simply falls on my soul like a whisper of wonder, breathed in awe by an angel’s Oh! You always manage to cloak my soul in an aura of delight. Your words fall like moonlit shadows that grace the ground with silvered light. This is purely an Ohhhhh of softness stroking my skin with a hint of fire.

I love it utterly utterly, YOU never cease to amaze me and always I value your writing. You can tell can’t you, drat I wonder what gives me away It must be my delicate hint of I love this utterly utterly that does it, hmmmmm?

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Ivy Rose
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8 posted 2002-06-01 12:48 PM


Magnus...Your poem is the glimmer of moonbeams dancing off the stars. At least, that's how it feels to me.  Lovely, romantic, poem!!!!!!  ***Ivy Rose
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9 posted 2002-06-01 01:03 AM


Take the hand of comfort close
into the bosom of thy soul
Lest it be of not what chose
in ring of bell, toll to be

Damn, Barry...loved the missed meter!  (If you say so)  You still speak to my heart.

Desperate for changing
Starving for truth
Closer where I started
Chasing after you

Lifehouse

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10 posted 2002-06-01 01:10 AM


I would REALLY like to know how you do that! You wow me everytime I read your work! Keep it up, eh?
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11 posted 2002-06-02 06:27 AM


meter shmeter...it's from your heart so it's perfect
JamesMichael
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12 posted 2002-06-02 06:31 AM


Very nice...James
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