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nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

0 posted 2002-05-31 07:42 AM

if thoughts could come true
bring me closer to you
if even for just one day
or a moment of sight
a smile of delight
would mean more
than words could say

each day presses more
each breath locks the door
to a future in lack, of control
if thoughts could come true
with a look into blue
all the ache
would become my console.

"Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less."
(Will Moss)

ethome
Member Patricius

since 2000-05-14

Posts 11858
New Brunswick Canada

1 posted 2002-05-31 07:51 AM

                "if thoughts could come true
                 with a look into blue
                 all the ache
                 would become my console."
I know what you mean! Often written this way myself........But as John Lee Hooker put it....."The blues is a healer"  That's another reason for writing them.
You're on a bluesy writing roll today....I enjoyed this!

nakdthoughts
Member Laureate

since 2000-10-29

Posts 19200
Between the Lines

2 posted 2002-05-31 07:55 AM

Hey "E" thanks...

M

Dulcinea
Senior Member

since 2001-07-22

Posts 774
IN

3 posted 2002-05-31 10:41 AM

Ironically, even those thoughts that do come true have a way of stirring up the "blues" too! Nicely done GF!

Quotation, n: The act of repeating erroneously the words of another.
- Ambrose Bierce

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

4 posted 2002-05-31 11:20 AM

Mm, I like that line about thoughts coming true. Perfectly stated.
Sandra

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

5 posted 2002-05-31 11:47 AM

They can, you know

jwesley
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-04-30

Posts 7563
Spring, Texas

6 posted 2002-05-31 01:25 PM

Blues are good for the soul, my friend...I believe that. They add credence to all else, as long as one doesn't dwell too long in their abode.

jwesley

Startime
Member Ascendant

since 2000-10-03

Posts 5918
Canada

7 posted 2002-05-31 02:26 PM

If only they did....stunning write...hugs...

Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams.

Madame Chipmunk
Member Rara Avis

since 2001-12-05

Posts 8296
Michigan

8 posted 2002-05-31 05:12 PM

each breath locks the door
to a future in lack, of control

I like that thought, Maureen...

~ lots of hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks

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