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. . . Goodbye . . .
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. . . Goodbye . . . |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Why all the silence? I do not whisper my love for you, I shout it at the top of my lungs. I LOVE YOU! I LOVE YOU! Must you do less? If so, goodbye. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
*sigh* how could anyone not respond...I hope you never have to say goodbye...that word has to be the saddest one ever said...hugs... |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Startime ~ Where have you been Wonderwoman? I have missed you terribly ... You never fail to inspire and/or encourage me  Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
Here, behind the screen I walk moonlit sky A soft touch unseen Weeping from goodbye HUGS...you are just wonderful and always inspire soft, sensual thoughts in me...thank you, sweet man...  |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Karen ~ weep no more fair one look up and you see your face warmed by sun and your heart by me Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. [This message has been edited by Interloper (05-30-2002 11:20 AM).] |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
darkness drifts awaytears are all wiped dry the warmth of your words bring a soft reply Love I leave with you whether it is in your life now or yet the essense of your dreams. |
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Hopeless Romantic Junior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 27 |
i ENJOYEDthe poem very much i couldn't imagine that silence I can't wait untill your next post |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Karen ~ you whisper in my ear breathlessly I listen to words I long to hear as eyes start to glisten HR ~ Why thank you Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Very nicely written.....emotion evoking for sure! |
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Startime Member Ascendant
since 2000-10-03
Posts 5918Canada |
words of soft caress over flesh, flowing talent you possess awe of you growing |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
I've been screamin it at the top of my lungs for a long time, now I have laryngitis  (sorry I haven't been on much, have missed reading you) |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
You mean you can't hear me??!! Beautiful write...beautiful words. ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Have I ever mentioned that you are the GR8est people in the whole world? Thank you Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Sven
since 1999-11-23
Posts 14937East Lansing, MI USA |
if you were indeed to shout it oh Great Voice of the Southland, then even the rocks and soil would hear it. . . well done. . . --------------------------------------------------------- To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sven ~ Thank you my good friend |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Bob darling boy now this is superb writing, the flow is divine the form is excellent. As always your writing is utterly utterly wonderful darling heart, you never fail to make me smile. You never write anything less than your best and this is exquisite, a smile just waiting to blossom. I love it utterly feel it like a soft caress stirring in your heart You know I can’t do senryu very well, but for your darling heart I’ll make an effort. This is utterly utterly wonderful Mmmmm indeed it’s delicious and I love it I love it utterly utterly love it   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy Breathe through the heat of our desire |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
I believe that timing is very important also...of course if we want to shout it from the rooftops we want them to feel the same...but it takes time to actually build a real relationship...the question is do you have the time to invest to see what will happen...or should I say are you willing to take the risk.... Don't mind me I get all of these kind of thoughts myself when the slightest thing goes wrong in a relationship....James |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Magnificent one ~ It must be almost midnight in GB. Thank you for your heart melting words. ~*~ yes and again yes your words bring my blood to boil with soft caresses |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
James ~ I couldn't agree more. I never write about one night stands though some have probably thought that. I speak of mature, resposible, responsive, and mutual love ... always [This message has been edited by Sunshine (05-30-2002 07:03 PM).] |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Oh yes..what a good poem. You tell her! Sandra |
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vandana
since 1999-10-22
Posts 10463USA |
enjoy |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sandra ~ You betchum nurse sidekick Vandana ~ Thank you for stopping by Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
I've lived your poem... and goodbye is what got said...but I couldn't settle for the whisper, you know. I'm adoring your poetry. You have much to tell. ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Janette
since 2001-07-20
Posts 2843Chicagoland for now |
WOW! This makes me swoon being so forthwith in it's meaning. Lucky lady who receives this one! [This message has been edited by Janette (05-30-2002 09:24 PM).] |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Just signing my name... Karilea |
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Kellie_Cantrell Senior Member
since 2002-05-22
Posts 1667New York |
Saying Goodbye is the hardest thing I have had to do lately. I had to say goodbye to not only an awesome and perfect teacher. But also a friend. Godbless Ms. Chadwick I love You! |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
iq ~ Good for you! Thank you for the wonderful compliment janette ~ I don't think anybody ever swooned over my work before. I am honored. Thanks for the read Sunshine ~ I didn't see the "X" Kellie ~ I'm glad my work evoked good feelings for you Thanks for stopping by and reading. Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I know I read this one yesterday and would have sworn I'd responded... but I must have used disappearing ink?? *S* The impact you've written doesn't disappear, though. *S* I wonder how many read this and think of times they should have said goodbye... and instead, kept loving and hoping and shouting themselves hoarse until the lack of reciprocation and echoing silence killed something inside. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Suthern ~ You hit the nail right on the haid That's exactly what I had in mind when I wrote it. You get the brass ring (if you don't already have it ).Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write. |
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Midnitesun
since 2001-05-18
Posts 28647Gaia |
But I don't want to say goodbye!!!!!!! Adieu. Later, gator. See ya next month? Anything but goodbye. I nearly always cry at goodbye. |
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ThUnDeRkYsS Senior Member
since 1999-09-23
Posts 727Wisconsin |
Wonderful, really like how you do it with your style of writing. Strive for higher levels, if they seem out of reach... Grow, and they will get closer. |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
But goodbye is much better than "lets just be friends" which drages goodbye out longer and makes it more painful... At least "goodbye" pulls the bandaid off swiftly. Nice job interloper...  ~ hugs for goodbyeLyra |
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Titia Geertman Member Ascendant
since 2001-05-07
Posts 5182Netherlands |
he he maybe you were shouting so loud that she's gone deaf?  Love your poem though, think it would cross the ocean? your shouting I mean LOL Titia A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess... |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
Bob, what a proud goodbye. Wonderfully written. Kethry Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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