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0 posted 05-29-2002 07:24 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Magnus

As black as coal in silent steel
above the depths of deep blue sea
A vessel made to war and win
gliding through waters casually

Sea in foam upon crest of wave
stirring the dolphins swimming free
Waters rushing like crystal fall
sailing the blue, the deep blue sea

Men on the bridge, in watch of harm
scanning the horizon in view
Lookouts in wait of the alarm
as waters flow in bluish hue

Clouds above blanket shining stars
as the glow of dawn brings the light
while crew below waking from sleep
feeling the sway so ever slight

Sounds of the oceans fall on ears
as life goes on beneath the swell
shrimp clicking as two whales whistle
the trill of a dolphin known well

Trail of a ship propellerís swish
beating in time to itís own drum
telling of speed and distance which
plots a bearing under the thumb

Lay below, rig the ship for dive
shut the hatches and be so fleet
Look alive and now take her deep
make your depth one five zero feet.

As silent as she comes, she goes
beneath the blue of waterís sea
Black steel and men of submarines
sailors protecting liberty

[This message has been edited by Magnus (05-29-2002 07:25 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Barry J. Tackett - All Rights Reserved
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Barry

The sensory explosion in this took me there...especially with my ears.  
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Wonderful Barry!!!
OH!, now this one has to be your best ever!!  Yes it is!
I have been sitting here patiently awaiting
this evenings read, your coffee is at the ready sire..
Would you like me to pour?
Dolphins....oh how I love them...and the sea!
My granddaughter collects anything and everything dolphin.
I'm not too keen on submarines though..
being a bit claustrophobic.
Yes...this is indeed your BEST!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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Thank you Martie...

I wish I could have added more images to it.
To give it the aura of how it really was..

The plume of water and air rising into the
sky about 100 feet from 12 huge air vents
that let the air out of the tanks that
kept the ship afloat...(ballast tanks)

The incline of the ship changing from level
to a down angle which helped drive the ship
beneath the waters...

The Officer of the Deck at the periscope
watching the waters come over the ship
until the ship was totally submerged and
on it's way down into the depths...

All of these things I experienced hundreds
of times....It was always so tranquil and
peaceful once the ship was submerged and
on a course to who knows where....

Going in harm's way...
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Thank You Nancy....I just felt it was time
for me to give you a little taste of how it
was on a submarine...

The mornings on the surface of the ocean
with the thunder clouds rising thousands
of feet into the air, many miles away...

Watching the sun rise,  the hues of color
of the sky changing gradually to a very
peaceful blue....No land in sight anywhere.
Hundreds of miles out in the ocean,  alone
and having it all to ourselves...

It was an awesome experience...

And you are right...being claustrophobic
had no place on a submarine...  Could be
and was a little cramped for 150 men to
share all of that space...  425 feet long
and 33 feet in diameter...  56 feet tall,
weighing about 8000 tons....

A very awesome and powerful ship...with
some very intimidating teeth....and claws...
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I think you did a wonderful job of this, Magnus...as time goes by, I can see you adding to this as the words roll in...
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KJ....ever heard of the word "sticky bun"?

NO?  I didn't think so....

That was a glazed cinnamon roll,  fresh out
of the oven,  baked during the "Midwatch"
from Midnight until six in the A.M.  Always
was a treat getting a big plate full of
them brought up to the "Control Room"
where the ship was driven from....That and
and cup of coffee....or cold milk (before
we ran out of fresh milk) (about a week
after sailing)....UMMMMM GOOOD!!!  I always
gained about 20 pounds when we went to sea.
We ate extremely well, which is a well known
fact of submarine life...  A sailor with
a full gut is a happy sailor....
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BRAVO!!! Wow, this is wonderful, sweet friend, this somehow made me feel seasick just thinking of 20,000 Leagues Under The Sea, only searching for Atlantis and looking out the windows and boards on the side to find coreal reefs and paradise on the sides and the fight for saving it all from pollution! (sigh) This is a fabulous poem of the navy, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Barry, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Magnificent as usual!  I too, caught the auditory on this and could almost hear all the sounds. A tremendous read, thank you!

...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes

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Very, very well written Barry...you paid wonderful homeage.  Don't think I could have been a submariner.  Was a visitor on one or two when in the Navy and that was enough. Beside, I can't swim and being on the surface is close enough to the depths for me (ha!).  Enjoyed this much.

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Unfortunately...we had no windows,  and the
only way you could see outside...was through
the periscope if there was an opportunity
to get some "periscope liberty"...Wasn't
a very good view though....Usually,  all
you could see was just more water around you
and occasionally,  a ship...but not often.

Thank You Noah....and I did get seasick a
couple of times when we were beneath some
very rough seas above us in the middle of
a hurricane...(many many years ago)....
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icequeen....The auditory images could be
taken even further....The sound of rain
above us was like a hissing noise...you
could hear the rain squalls on sonar and
know where they were and how far away..

We often times had carpenter fish around us..
You will probably guess what they sounded
like....  Yep, like a bunch of carpenters
hammering nails into a house being built...

It was always eerie listening to the sound
of a sonar ping bouncing off the hull in the
water when we were playing war games with
other ships...  The pulse of energy was
so strong that you could hear it through
the hull with your ears....  

That sound always will stay in my mind,
reminding me of the days of WWII when they
sat there waiting for the next depth charges
to rain down on them....hearing the sonar
pings....and the sound of the depth charge
dropping into the water prior to the most
powerful explosion a man could ever hear
with his ears, through water... Sound is
magnified about five times greather when
through water than through air...

Now I am rambling....sorry...
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Sorry...I KNOW STICKY BUNS...because I've MADE THEM....from SCRATCH....

just who do you think you're talking to anyway, a youngster?  I also bake sourdough and white bread from scratch, bake cakes from scratch, and you don't even want to ask about my pies...

*Sun walks away from this post wondering whatever made Magnus think she doesn't know anything about sticky buns...sigh
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JW...thanx....one of my friends,  also an
EX-submariner or "BubbleHead" as the surface
navy guys "skimmers" called us....HE could
not swim,  and they worked his butt off until
he finally could....He was an outstanding
submariner and is a lifelong friend...

We were always a very close nit group of
people....Could not help but be that way,
but I am sure you already know that...

Thanx Jimmy...
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Hey Barry!
Even I know what sticky buns are!!  
and I don't bake!
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OH MY....(sheepish grin, bowed head,  on
knees...paying homage to fellow poet...errrr,
baker...extraordinare....culinary specialist.

Queen Sun....

Thy lady,  doth thee see mine tears
Tears of most humble sadness and grief.
Tears of begged forgiveness and need.

Tears,  cause you ain't sent any sticky buns
down here to SC....sose that I can eats
them.....NOW!!!!!

Woman...bring thy knight the groceries...
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Nancy....you had to say it, didn't cha?

One sticky bun with one of your freshly
brewed cups of coffee...(since I don't
believe Sun is going to give me one,  I
think she is mad at me)  

Would be awesome!!!!!
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Me too, Barry...sticky buns.
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Martie...thanx much...you had to add the
little emoticon, didn't you...You know...
the one rolling it's eyes in disbelief...

Am I going to have to post a formal
apology to you LADIES of Passions,  since
I so well have stuck my feet in my sticky
bun mouth...so well....
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ahhhh which is more lovely... the sounds of living underwater... or the smell of sticky buns, made from scratch...baking in the oven?

hehehe...Sunshine - we are a pair - I've got a loaf of honey oat bread in the oven right now - and having my parents over for dinner this weekend - making a fresh, nice crustry loaf of French bread to go with the chicken cacciatore...and what should I serve for dessert...hmmm... I know!!  STICKY BUNS!!!

Barry, women who cook are hot. Or so I'm told.  *ROFL*
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Excellent Magnus...were you on a Los Angeles class...James
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Very well done Magnus.  An array of wonderful scenes......
Poems like this are a pleasure to read because they appeal so intimately to fellow poets!
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JM,  in reply to your question...NOPE...I
was on SSBN's(BALLISTIC MISSILE SUBS).....
USS JAMES MADISON, USS TECUMSEH (TWICE), USS
VON STEUBEN AND USS MARIANO G. VALLEJO FOR A TOTAL OF 29 DEPLOYMENTS....

THANX FOR THE INTEREST....
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BRAVO!  I loved it!
I thought subs were "boats."  Please educate me so I don't offend my swabby friends

Fool, said my Muse to me, look in thy heart and write.

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Interloper,  yes....subs have been called
"boats" for many years....

You won't offend them,  unless they ride
"ships" and you call them a "Skimmer"!!!
 
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