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1slick_lady
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standing on a shadow's lace

0 posted 2002-05-29 09:25 AM



What Did I Do So Right

how is it that
when I touch you
I feel
I leave my prints
when you
see my colors
you see all
of my tints
all I have to do
is think of you
and you inspire
my words
what did I do
so right
that to me
this has occurred
how do you
make me feel like this
you turn
and I feel stirred
I could whisper
on a mountain top
and in my soul I know
you have heard
no matter
where you are
I know I am
always there
we even say
the same things at times
there is so much
we share
you say you
miss me
even before
I am gone
and to your
precious love
I am
truly drawn

"The heart is the toughest part of the body, tenderness is in the hands." Carolyn Forche'

© Copyright 2002 Helen Chambers - All Rights Reserved
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Deep in the heart
1 posted 2002-05-29 09:31 AM


Be born?

Seymour Tabin
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2 posted 2002-05-29 09:32 AM


1slick_lady
You can't write it better or sweeter than this.

Toerag
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3 posted 2002-05-29 10:50 AM


Very well written....Yanno?...I like your picture, I envy that water, it's ability to touch you entirely, all over at the same time....
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4 posted 2002-05-29 04:06 PM




(big hugggssssss) Awwwwww, I know this feeling ever so well too, sweet friend, whenever I think of my dream girl Joanna she always inspires me and she is my motivation to encourage me to go on smiling so maybe soon I can win her heart! (kiss on cheek) This is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Helen, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-05-29 04:15 PM


LOL@Toerag!
Helen this is wonderful!
I adore the way your words
dance themselves
down the
page.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Sven
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6 posted 2002-05-29 04:19 PM


you have written. . . and that is enough. . .

wonderful helen. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

turtlefreak1979
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7 posted 2002-05-29 04:43 PM


i love this poem, it is amazing.

~alisa~

jwesley
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8 posted 2002-05-29 08:52 PM


'tis the way you opened the doors
to my heart,
the way you let the sun
into my soul,
the way you touched me
from afar,
'tis all these things,
and so much more...

I've missed you too...

jwesley

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9 posted 2002-05-29 09:04 PM


Helen,  this is so soft,  yet so romantic
and lovely in it's words and how you have
said the feelings..

Sunshine
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10 posted 2002-05-29 09:21 PM



Helen, I like the poem,
and I like the new pic...

icequeen
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11 posted 2002-05-29 09:25 PM


I love the flow of this. It is very, very beautiful. I will be reading your work a lot, I can see!

...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes

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