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Of Harmony
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Of Harmony |
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Martie
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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Of Harmony I take this thought all fragile with disquiet and lay it on the purple hue of sunset until you can hear the color that I long like skin it warms until it's soft then melts like footsteps wet on sidewalk lost in fragments then just gone Slow a minute then and wait for me for I am not as quick as I used to be and I look around sometimes and feel fear take me to places where bitter truth is painted dark by treasured sacred piece of me my heart This brittle life can be so surrounded in a light that in the last small piece of sun it strikes a cord like just begun then winks one last look into the pale ascent lost in crowds all heaven bent to pay respect to the monument that ashes build Give then with tip of head and lowered eyes a thought to peacefulness inside perhaps then all with struggles will hit their knees and listen to the way a chorus sounds of harmony [This message has been edited by Martie (05-28-2002 07:06 PM).] |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
You gone and done it again..... I don't want any excuses for your humble thoughts of yourself... Just wash them away and keep painting! |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Martie hi there You know I’m going to say this is Incredibly beautiful. Absolutely exquisite writing, I really do love your work, you are a writer of extraordinary skill, this really is so beautiful it reached right into me. Thank you for the gift of beauty in this write of heart, you have surpassed yourself   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Yay!!! Ooohhhhh...I always love that imagery you paint and make harmony of your own voice, sweet friend, this is wonderful! (kiss on cheek) Your wonderful words are always so magical to us all, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Msrtie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I take this thought all fragile with disquiet and lay it on the purple hue of sunset until you can hear the color that I long like skin it softens warms to whim then melts like footsteps wet on sidewalk lost in fragments then just gone ===================================== This brittle life can be so surrounded in a light that in the last small piece of sun it strikes a cord like just begun then winks one last look into the pale ascent lost in crowds all heaven bent to pay respect to the monument that ashes build ==================================== seems to me you heard more in that moment of silence than some hear in a lifetime...because you learned how to listen to the sky when it whispers. this is one exquisite write dear poetess... you wrapped us in the sunsets soul and sang us a prayer of harmony.... and you know I am so loving the rhyme you sprinkled this with. I remembering being one and the same ... closer even than the heat and the flame. Tom Kimmel [This message has been edited by Janet Marie (05-27-2002 10:44 PM).] |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
Dear Martie, Yes, life is a fragile thing. Your poem touches parts of me that no one has been able to reach. Michelle is smiling now, I assure you. Bless you, my gentle one. Michael |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
*small smile* |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie you make this a feeling that would be a pleasure to wear as morning enjoyed it |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
Martie, I felt like I was chasing shadows... thank you for that feel...sometimes, you know, only friend can pass that very quality along... |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Barry--nothing can stop me from painting...thanks for the support. Krissy--thank you for such a warm reply. Noah--Your enthusiasm always makes me smile. Chris--Is a small smile a good thing? Janet Marie--You always see so clearly! Michael--If this touched you so, then I am blessed. Dave--With the pleasure you make, you wear it well. Karilea--Hugs from one friend to another. [This message has been edited by Martie (05-28-2002 06:48 PM).] |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
sorry Martie, yes, it is a good thing. if the purpose of poetry (which is my opinion) is to make one feel, then you are the true definition of a poet. there is not a piece of yours that i read that doesn't strike somehow, some way into me and make me feel something. this one started hurting softly, and ended with a quiet, but not "bad" melancholy. sometimes it's hard to find the words to express how those feelings affect. Peace C [This message has been edited by Christopher (05-28-2002 08:55 PM).] |
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icequeen Senior Member
since 2001-12-09
Posts 633FL USA |
Martie, your poetry always gives me goosebumps. (That is the ultimate compliment you know  ) This one is, of course, intensely beautiful, and as I've told Magnus about his poetry - please please please publish a book of yours, so I can read it over and over again! Thank you for sharing ~ ...and her crown was formed by the ice in her eyes |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Martie, This piece does make the reader 'feel' and it touched a part of me that is hard to reach at times... You have a way of doing this...softly, gently as you play and dance with the words. ~Hugs to you dear poetess~ |
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Marge Tindal
since 1999-11-06
Posts 42384Florida's Foreverly Shores |
MartieSis~ You pen delicately with indelible ink~ *Hugs* ~*Marge*~ ~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~ |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
and I look around sometimes and feel fear take me to places where bitter truth is painted dark by treasured sacred piece of me my heart Right into my heart with this one, Martie... It almost feels like you wrote it for exactly the way I feel right now. Thank you.  ~loving thankful hugsLyra |
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suthern
since 1999-07-29
Posts 20723Louisiana |
I've read this several times... and with every read, different phrases claim my attention... You've written a kaleidoscope - every read is fresh and new but equal in beauty to the last... and the moods shift subtly adding depth. I can only breathe an awed wowwwwwwww. *S* |
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Toerag Member Ascendant
since 1999-07-29
Posts 5622Ala bam a |
What? Are you related to Balladeer?...this is superb....Even a dummy like me can appreciate this.... |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You are a field of flowers. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Your work always brings harmony to my life and others'. |
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Martie
Moderator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California |
Chris--Thank you so much for coming back with those words...they gave me a small smile. icequeen--will you be my publisher? Smiling at your lovely remark..thanks. Nancy--Your comments are always magic. Marge--hugs to you, sis! Lyra--Thank you for touching me. Ruth--Wow is such a wonderful word coming from you...thanks. Toe--Yes..we are blood brothers..he he...thanks for stopping by..I have missed your replies! Sy--Thanks for picking me and setting me on your table for awhile. Interloper--if this is true then I am very glad.. |
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