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SEA
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with you

0 posted 2002-05-26 03:23 AM



He said,
don’t rhyme
instead whisper
as to cause my heart
pause….
to hold the moment
of your touch
in poetic melt
to sooth the chill
left from straight lines
and conformity
He wanted jagged edges
mingled
with ragged breaths
that cloud the candlelight
swirl emotions,
till they spill over
making reality
rearrange…..


~SEA~



© Copyright 2002 S.E. A - All Rights Reserved
Christopher
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1 posted 2002-05-26 03:42 AM


i'm all jagged edges, you see,
bent across an ellipses...
running wild and free.

i'll chase around your rhyme
that whispered heat of passion...
save you the pain of mine.

ok, that's it - i tried to rhyme, but everytime it blanks my mind, so unrefined... you rock lady, and you whisper... oh so well.

SEA
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2 posted 2002-05-26 03:46 AM


thanks, you ain't so bad yourself there Kissy Face and your rhymes are fantastic
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3 posted 2002-05-26 03:48 AM


Yep...why he's my new hero.  But don't tell him 'cause his ego's near big as mine.  Good one, SEA for C!


but I'm lonely now, and I don't know how
to get it back to good

MB20

Christopher
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4 posted 2002-05-26 04:06 AM


you CANNOT be serious Susanofer - my rhymes are... well, we won't go there, becaue we're not supposed to do any personal attacks on members, and i might get mad at me if i start bashing me

Duncan - I didn't see that.

ethome
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5 posted 2002-05-26 04:36 AM


Well I won't get in the middle of this playful word romp but I will say I think Sea wrote a nice tribute! Probably more there than I know about...he he have a nice day!
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6 posted 2002-05-26 07:49 AM


Umm...I have to agree with C, Sea (heh) and say that his rhymes usually suck. Ooops..is that member bashing? Nah..it's only his poetry lollol...

his freeverse? Ah well, that's another story...

this is a lovely tribute, from a nice poetic hand..

K

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7 posted 2002-05-26 07:56 AM



SEA...you write anyolway you want...
but if you have to cater to some
cantankerous type poets, [we won't
name names], then we all win...

hugs, Mom

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8 posted 2002-05-26 08:11 AM


Sea,
I think he needs another dip in the Sea for not reading between the lines. LOL Enjoyed

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9 posted 2002-05-26 09:17 AM


very very cool...all of it...the poem and the responses ...
LOL@Chris, Duncan and Sy.  

I remembering being one and the same ...
closer even than the heat and the flame.

Tom Kimmel

[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (05-26-2002 09:18 AM).]

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10 posted 2002-05-26 09:21 AM


Nice SEA....very touching....


HEY CHRISTOPHER~

If I can RHYME you can...LOL  but give credit where its due, I've only done it maybe 3 times..... I myself, tend to stick to free~verse.....
Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

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11 posted 2002-05-26 01:07 PM




(smiles) Awwwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, yes, yes, I think Christopher is a wonderfully remarkable poet and friend to us all whose words are always so striking, and he sure can rhyme too! (kiss on cheek) This is wonderful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Susan, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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