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Kellie_Cantrell
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0 posted 2002-05-26 12:20 PM



take a look over there
the at which I swear
stares back at me
in which I flee
to make myself free from there
a tranquility stare
walk to a place that you wonder
where you will stare
take a look at that book
avoid the nonsense in the nook
take a peak
Just not speak
and write it in ink
just before the brink
take a look inside
for you just cannot hide
from those that have died

© Copyright 2002 Kellie M. Cantrell - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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1 posted 2002-05-26 05:03 AM


A very interseting format and the thought flow is full of poetic nuances of creativity.
Too well done to let it slip off the board without a comment!

Titia Geertman
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2 posted 2002-05-26 05:21 PM



It's hard to loose someone you really liked, isn't it.
I like the way you express your feelings in this poem, thanks for sharing.

Titia

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Sunshine
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3 posted 2002-05-26 08:47 PM



The second line confuses me
a little, but I'm sure once
you shed some light on it,
I'll understand...

the remainder of the poem is
good, and drew me along with
it all the way...

PaulValjean
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4 posted 2002-05-26 09:35 PM


I always like a poem that makes a statement at the end... especially when it is true....
*s*...

Marge Tindal
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5 posted 2002-05-26 09:48 PM


Kellie~
I enjoyed the way you worked the words here~

Sort of felt like letting your emotions play 'touch and let go' ?

Poignantly felt dear poetess~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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6 posted 2002-05-26 10:34 PM


I agree with Sunshine,  the second line is
a little confusing....I almost sense that in
the beginning,   you were sort of grasping
and feeling which way to go...

And....welcome to Passions...

ThisDiamond
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since 2002-02-22
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7 posted 2002-05-26 10:39 PM


I really like the way you let your feeling flow on the paper. As they make themselves comfortable, I will be here to read you.
ThisDiamond

Kellie_Cantrell
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since 2002-05-22
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8 posted 2003-07-13 04:11 AM


I don'tt hink about my poetry i let it just happen
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