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Tranquility Stare

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Kellie_Cantrell
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0 posted 05-26-2002 12:20 AM       View Profile for Kellie_Cantrell   Email Kellie_Cantrell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Kellie_Cantrell


take a look over there
the at which I swear
stares back at me
in which I flee
to make myself free from there
a tranquility stare
walk to a place that you wonder
where you will stare
take a look at that book
avoid the nonsense in the nook
take a peak
Just not speak
and write it in ink
just before the brink
take a look inside
for you just cannot hide
from those that have died
© Copyright 2002 Kellie M. Cantrell - All Rights Reserved
ethome
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New Brunswick Canada


1 posted 05-26-2002 05:03 AM       View Profile for ethome   Email ethome   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ethome's Home Page   View IP for ethome

A very interseting format and the thought flow is full of poetic nuances of creativity.
Too well done to let it slip off the board without a comment!
Titia Geertman
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2 posted 05-26-2002 05:21 PM       View Profile for Titia Geertman   Email Titia Geertman   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Titia Geertman's Home Page   View IP for Titia Geertman


It's hard to loose someone you really liked, isn't it.
I like the way you express your feelings in this poem, thanks for sharing.

Titia

A rose is a rose is a rose...I guess...
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Sunshine
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Listening to every heart


3 posted 05-26-2002 08:47 PM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


The second line confuses me
a little, but I'm sure once
you shed some light on it,
I'll understand...

the remainder of the poem is
good, and drew me along with
it all the way...
PaulValjean
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4 posted 05-26-2002 09:35 PM       View Profile for PaulValjean   Email PaulValjean   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit PaulValjean's Home Page   View IP for PaulValjean

I always like a poem that makes a statement at the end... especially when it is true....
*s*...
Marge Tindal
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5 posted 05-26-2002 09:48 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

Kellie~
I enjoyed the way you worked the words here~

Sort of felt like letting your emotions play 'touch and let go' ?

Poignantly felt dear poetess~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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Magnus
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6 posted 05-26-2002 10:34 PM       View Profile for Magnus   Email Magnus   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Magnus

I agree with Sunshine,  the second line is
a little confusing....I almost sense that in
the beginning,   you were sort of grasping
and feeling which way to go...

And....welcome to Passions...
ThisDiamond
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7 posted 05-26-2002 10:39 PM       View Profile for ThisDiamond   Email ThisDiamond   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit ThisDiamond's Home Page   View IP for ThisDiamond

I really like the way you let your feeling flow on the paper. As they make themselves comfortable, I will be here to read you.
ThisDiamond
Kellie_Cantrell
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Washington State


8 posted 07-13-2003 04:11 AM       View Profile for Kellie_Cantrell   Email Kellie_Cantrell   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Kellie_Cantrell

I don'tt hink about my poetry i let it just happen
 
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