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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738
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for now you own my very breath. Every waking thought consumes, and all my dreams are dreams of you. "or healer to awaken dead. I smell your scent upon the breeze-- I feel your fingers tracing me. once a lion, now appeased. And should at first I meet my death, I'll haunt this earth, to breathe your breath. in hopes I have a part in dreams..." proof of his sincerity... "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." "No." He wept. "I'm only me." and cradled me to my surprise... "I shall not leave you, not with ease." And still? I find it hard to breathe. Every breath I breathe--he's there. [This message has been edited by serenity (05-25-2002 03:33 AM).] |
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wayoutwalt Member Elite
since 1999-06-22
Posts 4870TEXAS (it's all big) |
real cool write yuh |
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Tracey Member Elite
since 2001-08-29
Posts 2808where insanity meets breeding |
He silenced me with depth of eyes and cradled me to my surprise... "I shall not leave you, not with ease." And still? I find it hard to breathe. I feel the breath of stifled air-- Every breath I breathe--he's there. Yep, I know this feeling…much to well. You got me with this one Karen. If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please? |
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Poet deVine
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-05-26
Posts 22612Hurricane Alley |
Oh man..this is POWERFUL...I love it. You should submit this to a magazine!  |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Yep, yep, yep, this is certainly a worthy poem of posting again.... Love the flow.... I know this feeling....as I walk, watch, feel everything around me driving my mind in a poetic way....searching for my next word, next verse... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Drawing me in grace of ease... once a lion, now appeased. And should at first I meet my death, I'll haunt this earth, to breathe your breath. WOW!!!!!!!!!Too excellent to have been written by a human being, Karen.... a witch, maybe.....  ~ big hugs & take a bow for this one!I really enjoyed! Lyra copyright2002 Lyra Nesius "poetry is life distilled" Gwendolyn Brooks [This message has been edited by Madame Chipmunk (05-25-2002 01:14 PM).] |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
WOW Luscious, this is indeed powerful... I loved every line  |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
Wow! Celeste this is intense and insightful! |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, this is soooooo powerful, sweet friend, I know this feeling so well where we just want to stay defensive from someone yet their intentions keep on allurng hearts of one another and finally we can't help but give into those desires! (sigh) This is fantastic, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Karen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
A single tear rode down his cheek-- proof of his sincerity... "Oh" I said, "You're poetry..." "No." He wept. "I'm only me." Sure hope this is the saddest thing I read all night...it's more than enough. |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Geez girl...I feel this... hugs you...it's hard to rework sometimes yes? I like it - a lot..  K |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
I wish that we had never met-- for now you own my very breath. Every waking thought consumes, and all my dreams are dreams of you. "Truly, you are witch," he said, "or healer to awaken dead. I smell your scent upon the breeze-- I feel your fingers tracing me. Drawing me in grace of ease... once a lion, now appeased. And should at first I meet my death, I'll haunt this earth, to breathe your breath. ================================ This has always been one of my faves of yours...how could it not be? you wrote me while you were writing you... and it took my breath away. a moth anthem baby... and a very very cool write.  I remembering being one and the same ... |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
All that, all this, stirred in magic and fairy dust... |
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