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Corinne
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0 posted 2002-05-24 08:27 PM


Hot

Wringing the water
from my hair,
an unexpected moment,
to find this man
watching;
I rise from the sea
from waves
that captured me,
and the sand --
the sand is so hot,
and I wonder:
are you a good stranger
or a bad one?


© 2002 Corinne Bailey

© Copyright 2002 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-05-24 08:32 PM



I suppose I shall have to write of Cold, just to see if I could do it as well as you've done Hot...

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2 posted 2002-05-24 09:19 PM


Excellent...could easily see this...and
such a natural question...  Hopefully a
good one...

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3 posted 2002-05-24 10:25 PM




(big hugggsssssss) Awwwwww, I love this, sweet friend, may you always lie on the sands and be greeted by a friend that will always bring great comfort and peace to you! (sigh) This is wonderful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

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ecrivan
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4 posted 2002-05-25 12:03 PM


is it only after a hot spell that this question is asked?...neat portrayal of the unexpected


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5 posted 2002-05-25 12:08 PM


Strangers are't good or bad...they're just, er, strange
ThUnDeRkYsS
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6 posted 2002-05-25 03:55 AM


If you are that unsure by looking at him, best to just avoid the situation in this day and age... lol  Nice job.

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7 posted 2002-05-25 04:23 AM


very cool (hot), and unexpected!

one would hope it's a good, bad stranger!

JamesMichael
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8 posted 2002-05-25 06:57 AM


Well was he good or bad?...or did he remain a stranger...James
Dark Stranger
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9 posted 2002-05-25 02:36 PM


he is the life guard
and you are in a no swim zone?

I bet he is baaad

dug the poem Cor

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10 posted 2002-05-25 04:10 PM


Corinne~
What intrigue ...
Pause in that moment of contemplation ... he'll provide the answer in a heartbeat !

I suspect ... 'inquisitively interested'~

'Bad' can be sooooooooo 'good'~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

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11 posted 2002-05-28 04:39 PM


freeze that moment Corinne. . .

yes. . . that one moment where wonder speaks. . .

-------------------------------------------------------

To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

Toerag
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12 posted 2002-05-28 04:40 PM


and Balladeer is stranger than anyone we know right?....You know I had to look at this one titled "Hot"....
Seymour Tabin
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13 posted 2002-05-28 05:10 PM


Corinne
Good write, enjoyed.

Corinne
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14 posted 2002-05-28 11:46 PM


Thanks everyone! Just a quicky!

Ha, ha, Toe - you just can't pass up a chance to pick on ole Deer, can 'ya?

No lifeguard, D - beaches I went to didn't have lifeguards. Coves tucked in between rocks.

Cor

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