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Enotneicna
Member

since 1999-06-06

Posts 340
Oakland, Or, USA

0 posted 2002-05-24 01:50 AM

This is my entry for a weekly competition at a place called Writer's Prompt, at www.writersprompt.com
I joined for a 30 day trial period, which allows me to enter weekly competitions and also to judge other entries.....$25 is the prize.
there were two other entries this week with mine and mine is rated in second place so far.....the competition ends at 7 am May 24th.

hands across the sea

hands across the sea
of time and space
spanning decades
closing the distance
to touch past and present
joining two linear points

hands across the sea
of imagination
bridging thought to reality
image to tangibility
to touch a spark to life
and give rise to visions

hands across the sea
of aversion
binding against carnage
of the mind
to touch with healing
and mend all wounds

hands across the sea
of indecision
transcending doubt
instilling hope
to touch a people
and change a destiny

hands across the sea
of tranquillity
where peace abides
and sings hearts
to touch every soul
with sweet compassion

5-22-02
Enotneicna
SLR

Words are my medicine.
Read and live and love and heal!

SEA

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Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

1 posted 2002-05-24 01:52 AM

"hands across the sea
of imagination
bridging thought to reality
image to tangibility
to touch a spark to life
and give rise to visions"

this is lovely, I hope you win!

Mysteria

Member Laureate

since 2001-03-07

Posts 18328
British Columbia, Canada

2 posted 2002-05-24 02:37 AM

Very beautiful and I sincerely hope that you win - let us know please

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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-05-24 12:30 PM

Ooo, yum! Y'know, "hands across the sea" reminds me of "hands across the water (water)" from tha' Paul McCartney song ... what's it called? Uncle Albert/Admiral Hansley or somethin'....

Anyway -- I really, really enjoyed this.

(thumbs s' up)

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Marge Tindal

Member Empyrean

since 1999-11-06

Posts 42384
Florida's Foreverly Shores

4 posted 2002-05-24 12:36 PM

Enotneicna~
You, my friend, have written a lovely piece~

'hands across the sea
of imagination
bridging thought to reality
image to tangibility
to touch a spark to life
and give rise to visions'

Holding hands across ancient times with you is my delight~

I'm going to check out the site .. thank you~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
noles1@totcon.com

Enotneicna
Member

since 1999-06-06

Posts 340
Oakland, Or, USA

5 posted 2002-05-24 06:25 PM

I finished in second place.

My ratings were as follows:

the prompt was "hands across the sea"

6.8   originality
6.6   appropriateness to prompt
6     interest
6.8   economy of form
6.6   voice and point of view
6.8   imagery and expressiveness
7.2   balance of unity and contrast
6.6   structure organization and flow
6.2   use of language, dialoge and poetic
      device
6.75  mechanics

66.6  total
Sea.......thank you!

Mysteria....thank you also!

bsquirrel......the phrase does have that    Beatlesflavor.......thanks!

Marge......Holding hands with you across ancient times is my delight as well.  I think you will like the site.
(hugggss)

Eno

Words are my medicine.
Read and live and love and heal!

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