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The Underside of the Ocean
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The Underside of the Ocean |
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Martie
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since 1999-09-21
Posts 28049California 
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The Underside of the Ocean Breathe she is like sunshine mixed with soft and just a hint of spring’s ripe spilled breast Ah but her eyes her eyes are the color of the underside of the ocean Can you tell I am besotted captured by the smile that flicks on and off the humming and shrieks of unfolding I look at her and see more then one beginning for being a grandmother is a landmark step down a path that takes me past myself to the future and back to my own first baby now past Her small hand pulling my hair pulls me also into the sweet enormity of motherhood where my fullness let down at a whimper and wetted my clothing with impatience where I winged my way and was taught by love I can still feel that tingle in a tear and I’m amazed at the way life ebbs and flows and still I question the grand plan knowing fragile skin sometimes cannot keep life safe for breath is as diaphanous as wings on butterflies |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
You did not provide a Kleenex alert. What must I do to remind you that you write of chimes and bluebells...and when you do, you must bring Kleenex... |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  BRAVO!!! Oh my gosh, I just love the way you express things, sweet friend, and may your dreams always flow gracefully and be transparent to all like butterflies golden wings! (kiss on cheek) This is lovely, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Martie, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
If, by chance, a hand of a small soul is offered, and the teacher is one of common blood then the Learning never stops neither does the Love Remarkable writing, Martie. A future as vast as the itch for its belly to be scratched. tSR |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Oh sweet Martie...only you... Only you could have written this beautiful piece that makes my eyes glisten... Only you could pen such a perfect closing line as this... "for breath is as diaphanous as wings on butterflies" Thank you for the remember... ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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jwesley Member Rara Avis
since 2000-04-30
Posts 7563Spring, Texas |
Very beautiful Martie...Kleenex or not.... jwesley |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
OK, I use paper towels....Kleenex just tear apart too fast.... This is a very visual and touching write of two people.....one grown, one growing and two very tender and precious hearts beating together... I love this one Martie!!! |
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Severn Member Rara Avis
since 1999-07-17
Posts 7704 |
Sigh..sigh..sigh..sigh..sigh etc  K |
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Auguste
since 2000-02-16
Posts 3953By the sea |
See, didn't I tell you that line belonged in a poem?  A lovely poem of your dear, Samantha, Martie, and one that I'm keeping. *hugs* my friendMichael |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
can still feel that tingle in a tear and I’m amazed at the way life ebbs and flows and still I question the grand plan knowing fragile skin sometimes cannot keep life safe for breath is as diaphanous as wings on butterflies I don't know how you do it, Martie...but this is another piece of your brilliance...and thank you for sharing this bit of your life with us. ~ grandmotherly hugsLyra |
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Mysteria
since 2001-03-07
Posts 18328British Columbia, Canada |
Ah but I know these "tingles" too well, and would not trade them for anything. I do enjoy how you write of them for us "grammies" though for you speak all of our hearts. |
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ethome Member Patricius
since 2000-05-14
Posts 11858New Brunswick Canada |
"Breathe she is like sunshine mixed with soft and just a hint of spring’s ripe spilled breast Ah but her eyes her eyes are the color of the underside of the ocean" Martie....There's only one way to describe the imagery when you write and that's LUSH! |
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ecrivan Member Elite
since 2001-12-10
Posts 3923my own state |
I question the grand plan too Martie, and all that we have protecting us from harsher elements..nicely written |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Martie, You have painted a picture with the softest of palettes. It can only be loved. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
tender loving...beautiful M |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
Her small hand pulling my hair pulls me also into the sweet enormity of motherhood where my fullness let down at a whimper and wetted my clothing with impatience where I winged my way and was taught by love I can still feel that tingle in a tear and I'm amazed at the way life ebbs and flows and still I question the grand plan knowing fragile skin sometimes cannot keep life safe for breath is as diaphanous as wings on butterflies ========================= oh my.... OH MY.... when she arrived, I said I couldnt wait to see the poetry she inspired in you... I should have known youd take that to higher level of inspiration and reflection. and you already know those last two lines are now etched on my heart...with 2 butterfly sighs.  for M & V  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Arrrrrgh! (that's a good one) YOU ROCK! She said burn ... together. |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
you did it again martie... i really love the way you throw your words together. it's "simple" in construction, without snazzy, flowery phrases, but so complex in intent and function. and with this one... while i have absolutely no desire to go through the whole pregnancy and delivery, i have to admit a certain envy that i will never be able to feel what it is like to be a mother. from your words here and the words of others, it is a truly unique gift. thanks for listening to me ramble Chris |
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RMW Senior Member
since 2001-03-21
Posts 1424 |
Martie, this is excellent. Bob |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
ms martie can imagine how this fits lovely work lady enjoyed reading it |
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Cirrus Member
since 2002-05-12
Posts 55 |
oH mARTIE, This is so beautiful, I have tears rolling down my face, right now..... seriously. going into my library |
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Denise
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Member Seraphic
since 1999-08-22
Posts 22648 |
A beautiful, breathtaking, expression from the heart! Just lovely, Martie! |
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