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Saunni
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since 2000-07-11
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0 posted 2002-05-22 07:50 PM


A Single Breath Exposed Me

It appeared life was at an equal balance
Was able to call on the sun when the clouds laid lower
I could take the dreary, though weary, and stand below it
Knowing rays of patience would purge and take over...

Stored for safe keeping for that right moment
I was like an aged bottle that time tenderly touched
Then a few years, real life revealed, my second chosen
A single breath exposed me when no longer covered in dust...

Nothing to hide me now from raging visions that flow
And, sacred doesn't even own a pair of wings on it's back
A single breath exposed me to what remained hidden
And, that slight hesitation resides in any will to laugh...

Just surrounded by echo's of bad fortune and head on into fate
A heart's impression imbedded in pillows red tear stained
For, serenity doesn't knock on this door of sadness at all
And, a single breath exposed me the instant I acknowledged pain...

Unfamiliar surely occupies the very heart of the heart
Runs deeper then any valley between two rising hills
Maze like features keeps a continual dead end to go back
A single breath exposed me when I stopped believing in good will...

Anguish and no certainty rest in the arms of the exposed
With not even the assurance of which way I should go
A single breath exposed me when the world bowed down to a breeze
And, all dust that sheltered gave way when it gained it's speed...



Sauni The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

[This message has been edited by Saunni (05-22-2002 10:45 PM).]

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powerofthysword
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since 2002-05-22
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1 posted 2002-05-22 08:17 PM


Excellent style of writing, I really like it
a lot. Would you please read my poem and tell
me what you think. Powerofthysword

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-05-22 08:33 PM




BRAVO!!! Oh Saunni, this is fabulous, sweet friend, you bring the whole world to a standstill with your gorgeous words and paint a beautiful vision of spirituality! (kiss on cheek) This is filled with both a lovely and haunting feel of serenity, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Saunni, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Sven
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3 posted 2002-05-23 04:37 PM


saunni. . . there's something here. . . yes, it's you. . . growing. . .

well done my friend. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14
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New Brunswick Canada
4 posted 2002-05-23 05:07 PM


Saunni....this is a very deep and wonderful write....good work!
Aimster
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since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297
Charlotte, NC
5 posted 2002-05-23 10:17 PM


saunni~

amazing and intense write from your
beautiful pen...as always so lovely
to read you.
take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

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