Soft the Bell of Vespertine

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Tim
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since 1999-06-08

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0 posted 2002-05-21 07:01 PM

When darkness fell there rang a bell,
As nature knelt in silent praise,
Of day's demise in western skies,
To passing of sun's piercing rays.

Came Luna's glow on earth below,
Encaptured all in moon's enthrall,
Upon the land as tender hand,
Of eventide did softly fall.

Rang soft the bell as night befell,
Bestowing both on man and beast,
Peace undefiled, by stars beguiled,
From heaven's font all sins released.

Rang heralder of night divine,
Rang soft the bell of vespertine.

[This message has been edited by Tim (05-21-2002 07:03 PM).]

rwood
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since 2000-02-29

Posts 3793
Tennessee

1 posted 2002-05-21 07:58 PM

Beautiful. And one of my favorite words..vespertine. Soft flow..message of hope.

Sincerely,
Reg

msflame
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since 2002-05-21

Posts 188

2 posted 2002-05-21 08:03 PM

your rhyme is excellent, your scheme well executed, but that's just my humble opinion, just reads so well.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-05-21 08:10 PM

I do so enjoy your passion with the word vespertine - it always adds a quality to your poetry that no one else can touch...

thank you...

Martie

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4 posted 2002-05-21 08:31 PM

Tim

I wish I could see it in the beauty that you do. So lovely!

Mistletoe Angel

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5 posted 2002-05-21 09:40 PM

YAY!!! Oh Tim, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I absolutely love this vision, just the thought of standing on heavens belfry and ringing these sweet bells to the world makes me smile with the angels! (big hugggsssssss) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Tim, thank you for sharing!

May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

NewEnglandlazurlu
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6 posted 2002-05-21 10:23 PM

I just loved this to pieces. It made me feel all warm and snuggly. Like I was rocking in a hammock on a night drenched with moonlight. Wonderful, just wonderful. Hugs, Marti

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Christopher

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Purgatorial Incarceration

7 posted 2002-05-22 06:28 AM

generally not much on rhyming poems, but this one grabbed and held. the tone fits well with what seemed to me a smooth flow.

ethome
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since 2000-05-14

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New Brunswick Canada

8 posted 2002-05-22 07:37 AM

This is a delightful traditional style poem. Excellent rhyme scheme with tender images in each ine!

Kethry
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since 2000-07-29

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Victoria Australia

9 posted 2002-05-22 08:21 AM

Tim,
this is stunning! It took my breath away, the internal rhyme and the flow - magnificent
Keth

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Nan

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10 posted 2002-05-23 11:04 PM

A "soft" bell.. what a nice visage..

Greeneyes

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11 posted 2002-05-23 11:12 PM

Amazing.....
Lauren~

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one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

Cirrus
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12 posted 2002-05-25 08:05 PM

Beautiful!

Elizabeth Santos
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since 1999-11-08

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Pennsylvania

13 posted 2002-05-25 10:03 PM

This is so lovely in every way
The theme, the tone of the poem, your meter and rhyme, everything perfect!
Loved this!
Liz

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