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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855
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Her smile is sometimes a storm, yet her rain will not wet -- no sleep in cool remembered scent. No easement in her lightning tongue. Her voice is sometimes a thorn. A clutch to me so piercing close. To proffer blood up for her rose. Watch its colors fold, unchanging. Time is sometimes unspent whens. Spooling warmth above rock forms. You can hear its slowly moving. Hover as we lay below. At the point of exhaustion. Flowers do not leave the soil. Where the gate seems sanded shut. And what comes does so in toil. She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-21-2002 05:45 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
yes..I read this fast... yanno why? I almost wrote it! yes..sometimes? I feel sorry for him... I am/can be a lot to deal with.... you remind me of him..but a lot gentler. but time does strange things...beware, luv? |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Ah, Sen. My constant poetic companion.  Here's a secret of my verse -- almost any time I say "She", I actually mean "me"! Shhh... don't tell.  Basically, ah'm just really, really, really tired. And ah'm not sure why. Thanks for yr concern and yr friendship. Talk to ya. She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-21-2002 05:51 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
mike? ah no. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I'm really, really tired too Mike...methinks it's your upcoming trip, anticipation can do that.. hugs M |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mike....Exhaustion and being tired is exactly what I derived from this. Well done! ... Time for a nap, I think! |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Glad you both enjoyed. Now .... uh .... how come there's no sleepy-guy icon? Oh wait, yeh there is .... Ahhh... comfy! She said burn ... together. -TON [This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-21-2002 06:06 PM).] |
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Zinsser Senior Member
since 2001-02-27
Posts 1641Calif. |
I was getting way to tired too... had a ton of overtime coming... instead took some comp days off work... needed the money but the days off were a God send... get some rest ... have some fun... |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Thanks, Zinsser. She said burn ... together. |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Well, you write beautifully when tired. Sandra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
My thoughts are exactly as Sandra says... You write beautifully when tired... Get some rest, kick back and relax. Love the write! ~Hugs~ ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
  Thanks, both of y'. She said burn ... together. |
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