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Christopher

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0 posted 2002-05-21 03:07 PM

I'm sure the rambling will end one of these days...

Plunder the Sun
©2002 C.G. Ward

it’s been a lifetime
since I used hyperbole to
excuse my absence from the reality
of your dreams.

like standing at that cliff
where something caught your eye
while I looked down on a vertical slice
of life as it waterfell away
into the waves of a man-made lake.

too bad we couldn’t dive
its depths like we did each other.

instead, like Icarus,
we attempted to flee ourselves,
chasing dreams of immortality…
if only in the legends of our minds.

could we plunder the sun
for a warmth our hearts would never find?

no, we flew too high, too far,
while the heat of failed aspirations
melted resolve from our ankles.

plummeting.
falling, until we landed up-side-down
on the tip of a volcano
ready to erupt the first time
our tectonics shifted too close
to grating against the standard of our living.

it’s been a lifetime
since I used hyperbole to
excuse your absence from the reality
of my dreams.

[This message has been edited by Christopher (05-21-2002 08:28 PM).]

devina
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since 1999-10-28

Posts 3539
Cali

1 posted 2002-05-21 03:13 PM

I'm beginning to look forward to your ramblings C...

Never know if you're rambling or sulking...

*so I'll just send the damn hugs and get it over with!!!*

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...

Elizabeth Cor
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Over the river and through the woods

2 posted 2002-05-21 04:54 PM

Christ.

I love this.

Very different from your usual writes... clear, patterned, and… not flowing… but continual: a curling ribbon instead of a river...

only one complaint:

"like standing at that cliff
where you got something in your eye"

~shaking head~ doesn't work...

plunder the sun...

~sigh~

I envy your mind sometimes... what it sees, creates... ~smallsmile~ but only sometimes...

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (05-21-2002 04:55 PM).]

Magnus

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3 posted 2002-05-21 05:52 PM

Chris, excellent ramble...keep on rambling.

Christopher

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4 posted 2002-05-21 06:24 PM

T - Just rambling... *I don't sulk*

Meg - Thank you - looking back at it, i don't like the way it was either...this might work better... only sometimes? now why is that?

Magnus - i've a feeling i will. thank you.

Chris

rwood
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5 posted 2002-05-21 07:31 PM

Well...I could read your ramblings for a lifetime~grin* but on a serious note, sooo many ways to take this..can I please take this as in "7 inches from the midday sun" Santana very hot stuff (can't help myself)...sometimes..we just can't all be Daedalus..and make it. But it was good for what it was worth?..Make sense? Great vineage.

Reg

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Christopher

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6 posted 2002-05-22 04:40 AM

reg - you can read it however you want to

all this... this writing, rambling, carrying on, is part of a journey that never ends. thank you for sharing in it.

Greeneyes

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In Your Poetic Mind

7 posted 2002-05-22 11:00 AM

Very nicely done Christopher~

wonderful imagery....

Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

Sunshine

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Listening to every heart

8 posted 2002-05-22 11:07 AM

I shall let you know
when the rambling can
stop. Mom

kaile

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9 posted 2002-05-22 01:53 PM

Chris,

who are you trying to kid?

superb imagery...this must sound so trivial to you but the conversion of the noun "waterfall" to the verb "waterfell" was what caught my eye and delighted me best...

Tiersdin
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10 posted 2002-05-22 02:23 PM

Another masterpeice to add to my collection...

well done!

~Tier

"I shall never bond again, as I have bonded with you..."

bsquirrel

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11 posted 2002-05-22 03:57 PM

I like the images y' give this.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Martie

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12 posted 2002-05-22 04:52 PM

Chris

The mind is such an intricate thing...mixed with the ability that you have of building words with it..you take interesting and honest looks inside yourself and into feelings, which I enjoy. Wheew...that was long winded of me. Hope you know I liked this.

Severn
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13 posted 2002-05-22 05:48 PM

Well hon I'm still thinking about the plummeting/falling, too/to business...grrrrr..in fact - it's been bugging me - THANKS!

heh...

will get back to you on it...

huggles

K

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Christopher

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14 posted 2002-05-22 09:40 PM

Lauren - thanks you. imagery is good, right?

Kari - Yes'm. I'll keep on 'til then.

faterider - kid? myself most likely, as self-delusion is highly underrated in my op.

and comments like that never sound trivial, i was pretty happy with that one as well! thank you

Tier - hugs you, but i'm guessing if i'm in there, you're collection's not all that discerning!

bsquirrel - thank you for reading and replying

Martie - always happy to hear your thoughts and comments... wind away! i sincerely appreciate your appreciation of my introspectiveness.

K - *tap-taptap* waiiiiting.

serenity blaze
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15 posted 2002-05-23 03:59 PM

"And now it's time for me to go,
The autumn moon lights my way.
But now I smell the rain,
And with it pain,
And it's headed my way.
Ah, sometimes I grow so tired,
But I know one thing I got to do..."

Ramble On--Led Zeppelin

And now, C, the question is...can ya keep 'em coming?

ethome
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16 posted 2002-05-23 04:04 PM

Yes yes, the entire piece is full of delightful creative hyperbole......I really enjoyed it!

Christopher

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17 posted 2002-05-23 04:35 PM

Midi K - Thanks for sticking the song in my head... lol. And, well - fouteen years now, and i'm still doing good... so i hope so!

ethome - thanks - hyperbole has its uses sometimes.

Chris

Duncan
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18 posted 2002-05-23 08:19 PM

it’s been a lifetime
since I used hyperbole to
excuse your absence from the reality
of my dreams.

I've been reading this for a couple days. Still not sure what I wanna say, except that the way you use words is very cool. You do things with the thought or meaning of them, that I'd never think to do (at least, not sober...lol). And your continued 'rambling' is really tempting me to throw brevity away for a moment or two. We'll see.

Gemini
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19 posted 2002-05-23 08:23 PM

Christopher-Hyperbole or not, ramble away, very excellent write.

Christopher

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20 posted 2002-05-24 12:36 PM

Gemini - thank you for your visit and your acceptance.

Duncan - i would LOVE to see you ditch the brevity here and there... what you do already rocks... and i would love to see what goes on in that cranium full-bore.

peace, and thank you.

Chris

[This message has been edited by Christopher (05-24-2002 12:39 AM).]

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