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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 2002-05-21 08:03 AM


we make the dance water
when we sing with our eyes
the touch songs

we make the tree winds
when our fingers entwine
like hand hold feathers

I reach to your soul pockets
where you carry treasure
you make me look long there

and I avoid where I know it is
so my touch will last
longer than you can stand

I show you your heaven piece
when it is found
and beg you to hide it again

in front of my eyes slowly


©Dark

© Copyright 2002 ©Dark 2k - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-05-21 08:11 AM


The closest thing I can come up with in typing to compare to the sound I just made as I read your closing lines...is "oooh."

Trust me. "oooh" doesn't even come close...

Mistletoe Angel
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2 posted 2002-05-21 08:35 AM




(smiles) Awwwwwwww, lost in their eyes, I LOVE IT!!! (big hugggsssss) Your words always sing from all the senses and emotions of the heart, sweet friend, this is a true keeper I know your love will always enjoy, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-21-2002 08:35 AM).]

Sunshine
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Listening to every heart
3 posted 2002-05-21 08:43 AM



There are a number of adjectives, but all are held in silent abeyance...

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
4 posted 2002-05-21 09:15 AM


*silently nodding in understanding here*

Martie
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5 posted 2002-05-21 10:17 AM


DS

You make love into art, as it should be.

Indigo
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6 posted 2002-05-21 03:44 PM


your thought touch,
an invisible brand
applied
to the senses...
painless
yet swollen
with intent.


Indigo

bsquirrel
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7 posted 2002-05-21 04:22 PM


Glad yr haunting these pages again, DS. It's cold without yr verse sometimes.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Dark Stranger
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8 posted 2002-05-21 04:30 PM


ms serene...thank you lady..nice to see you
speechless? grin


noah, thanks my friend it is fun to read your comments

Sunshine Good Morning ms sun lady, thank you for the read

Enchantress, bless your smile and your eyes, slow hugs to you

ms martie, thanks lady friend for the soft touch whisper

Indigo, pleasure is a woman
that walks slowly by
and waits just long enough
to be seen smiling, thanks babe

BSQ humble thanks my friend

rwood
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Tennessee
9 posted 2002-05-21 07:37 PM


I show you your heaven piece
when it is found
and beg you to hide it again

in front of my eyes slowly


This is touch with all of the senses..enjoyed.

Sincerely,
Reg

Marsha
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10 posted 2002-05-21 07:57 PM


DS darling boy this is utterly beautiful stunningly well written, you know for certain that etched into my soul are the words Dark. No one paints word pictures with your consummate skill, nobody does it like you. I love the way you layer the scene, build it into a masterpiece, truly exquisite darling boy. You know I’m going to say I love this utterly don’t you? And of course you know I’m smiling brightly


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

Dark Stranger
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West Coast
11 posted 2002-05-22 12:39 PM


regina, thanks babe for the wave wiggle
you are sweet slivers of southern

ms marsha, you amaze me with your reads and comments, such gracious offering of warm, thanks to you babe

Corinne
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state of confusion
12 posted 2002-05-22 11:01 PM


Or: Heaven: Peace: Find?

Smooth.

Cor

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