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Dear Mister Editor............ok, Larry

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Balladeer
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I found an error in the news that I would like to mention
With hopes that you are kind enough to give it your attention,
For, on the page announcing deaths, I found it rather queer
That, though I searched from start to end, my name did not appear.

Although it is a small mistake, I feel, in my condition,
That I deserve at very least a little recognition.
I can't believe you didn't know that I had passed away.
You spelled the name right of my girl we buried yesterday.

Or did you think those left behind can just go right on living,
Faced with only emptiness and nothing left for giving?
Taken from the only thing that kept my heart alive,
How is it possible you'd think that I could still survive?

Your writers on the evening shift must have heard the sound
My torn heart made the moment that they placed her in the ground.
Perhaps they thought a cold wind rose and blew with icy breath
Instead of knowing it was me within the throes of death.

Now that I have done my best to bring this fact to light
I'm sure that you are willing to correct your oversight.
Tomorrow in the morning news, please try to tell my side
For, though I breathe, I feel as though I were the one who died.
© Copyright 2002 Michael Mack - All Rights Reserved
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Michael

I think there are some things worse then death...such a heart breaking poem of feeling, deer.  Left me rather speechless.
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2 posted 05-20-2002 09:47 PM       View Profile for skyshine   Email skyshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit skyshine's Home Page   View IP for skyshine

This is very powerful, Balladeer. It's not what I expected from the title. Very well done.

~sky

You look inside my wild mind
never knowing what you'll find
still I want you all the time
yeah I do
'cause you get me
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(big hugggssssssss) Oh Balladeer, this is so very sad indeed, sweet friend, I could never imagine anyones name bring forgotten or unmentioned like this, sweet friend, this upsets me greatly, but I know deep down that all of us won't rest until everyone knows what a special person Ginger as is Larry is and she is mentioned! (sad sigh) You have such a loving golden heart, sweet friend, we are all so fortunate to have such a friend like you, God Bless You!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-20-2002 09:51 PM).]

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Mike,
Another excellent write.
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Michael ... this is a treasure for all who know this feeling ... you've captured it in a very profound way sweet poet.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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You’ve put into gentle words how it feels to lose a loved one. For it is true that a part of us dies too. And when that loved one is a child, I’ve no doubt that it feels like we have died completely.
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A difficult emotion, presented so tenderly. There is a reason I keep reading your poetry.
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Oh Balladeer...

This is so creative, so touching, and so accurate a feeling, I'm sure.  It is not those who have gone on to better grasses for which we are sad, it is for those left in earthly grasses, missing loved ones so.  I love this writing, and I'm sure he does, too.

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Michael,
I like it everytime I read. Written with an understanding that conveys the truth. Thank you for your generosity and no permission was necessary but the consideration meant everything.

P.S. Please explain to Noah the name "not mentioned" in the poem is the parents not the daughters.
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’Deer dearest heart your writing is without doubt so incredible it always expresses perfectly the feeling and this does. Your compassion, your ability to share your thoughts and feelings show what a really special man you are. I can see by Larry’s reply he values your words greatly, as do I. Perfect writing as always I love the way you’ve said it all.

Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy


Breathe through the heat of our desire
Thy coolness and they balm
Let sense be dumb let flesh retire
Speak through the eathquake wind and fire
Oh

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(big hugggssssssss) Oh Larry, I'm so very sorry if I read this poem the wrong way, I apologize for sometimes when I read poems I think of it one way because I am very sensitive and don't know what else to say! It is Ginger who must always be remembered and loved in our hearts, but the parents too must always be comforted and reached out to in times like these, so my heart goes out to you! Thank you so much for pointing that out for me, forgive me if I read this wrongly! (sigh)



Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-20-2002 10:40 PM).]

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Michael and Larry,

I think this pretty well says the feelings
of us all...

Thanx 'Deer....I too, appreciated this one..
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You are doing a pretty good job of leaving us speechless...
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Sigh~...I just can't imagine. Touching..so touching this is and I still pray for healing spirit..but wonder if anything would ever be the same..thank you for this..you both are wonderful men. The sharing here is worth so much more than you know to even me.

Sincerely,
Reg
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special you are....


Greeneyes~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

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Noah you dear sweet young man,
I was teasing but needed for you to understand the 'Deers message. Please don't take offense. I still like you.
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Michael,

i wish i can say more than "grand write"..but this left me quite speechless
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i remember this one Michael. these are the poems of yours that make me a fan.

Chris
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Michael~
*hugs* for you~
~*Marge*~

~*The pen of the poet never runs out of ink, as long as we breathe.*~
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This is so true, so real, and so well written. Thank you.

Nan

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Ouch ------ and yet, yes.... Sadly, yes.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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incredible..... tears.  

Cherish the good memories past and look forward to the adventure called Tomorrow.
But above all... be kind to yourself today.

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Hello Michael

This was so wonderfully written and so very true.  Thank you for your powerful words.

Take care.....Sue

Suetang

 
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