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Open Poetry #20

Flash

kellinjar
Junior Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 40
New Brunswick, Canada

0 posted 2002-05-20 02:44 AM

Flashes of light arc across the sky
Lightning dances randomly before my eye
Chances slim that it will come near
An ending quick is not what I fear
Hard, stinging, full of pain
Blanketing, drenching like the rain
The clouds are thick covering all
Lean to far and I could fall
Into you, I would be consumed
My heart and mind would be marooned
A flash of light invades my mind
I follow it in not knowing what I'll find
Chaos, emptiness, combined in one
Rage and Peace, a moment and done
As I wait rain falls on my skin
The door is locked, please let me in

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Kellinjar
http://www.geocities.com/kellinjar/ps/

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

1 posted 2002-05-20 08:20 AM

Great use of a metaphor here...

implied danger and excitement and all caution to the wind too.

I liked this much.

Kethry
Member Rara Avis

since 2000-07-29

Posts 9082
Victoria Australia

2 posted 2002-05-20 08:46 AM

good poem.

Kethry

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown

Sunshine

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since 1999-06-25

Posts 63354
Listening to every heart

3 posted 2002-05-20 09:47 AM

This has a great encircling effect,
reminding me of a tornado...

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