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mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

0 posted 2002-05-19 03:30 AM

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Why so down?
What is this distance I feel?
It was not there before.
Did you not say
you love me there?

Why so down?
I lost you a while ago
I think you should know
stumbled around
lost, alone, somewhere,
and then there you were
found.

I will not tell you about alone.
I will not tell you about hurt
I hope you never feel,
this cloying, personal thing,
each to each real
yet never really found with words.

Oh, but this down.
A million miles away
and without seeing your face
I feel your frown.
Ten million in this unknown place
and not a feeling sway.
Twenty, and I would say
what is that blue star
so far away?

I hold out my hand to you
now,
I who, not knowing, knew
that through this thing you use
you know me better
than touch would ever prove.

My thoughts pale that you should go.
Whatever reality you see
it is not me,
the mourning call you hear
is not what you believe,
and your prayer goes not to God
but to fear.

I wait to sing to you.
I wait to hear you speak to me
in whatever way you choose.
I wait to see, to feel
the far end
of infinity.

We are real.
You know it's true.
Touch me now.

I am here.

copyright 2002

[This message has been edited by mirror man (05-19-2002 03:36 AM).]

IKNAP
Junior Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 47
Torrington, Connecticut

1 posted 2002-05-19 03:35 AM

getting people depressed is like shooting fish in a baroll

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

2 posted 2002-05-19 03:38 AM

IKNAP -- "getting people depressed is like shooting fish in a baroll". Please explain.

IKNAP
Junior Member

since 2002-05-19

Posts 47
Torrington, Connecticut

3 posted 2002-05-19 03:46 AM

i enjoyed you poem. my fish comment is a old, bad happit i have with thoughts on anything sad. i really enjoyed you poem and i hope you will enjoy mine

mirror man
Senior Member

since 2001-01-08

Posts 814

4 posted 2002-05-19 07:22 AM

IKNAP -- thank you for your comment, but my request was not intended to change your opinion; it was only too cryptic for a clear understanding. I am interested in knowing what strikes you as sad about this poem. It is not intended to be sad, but even if a hundred agee it is not sad, I would still be interested in knowing the other view.

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