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Honeybee
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0 posted 05-16-2002 12:08 AM       View Profile for Honeybee   Email Honeybee   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Honeybee


Deaf Eyes

Tick tock timebomb,
rotting from the inside out,
I'm the one they all blame
when their jigsaw life refuses to fit.

I am no swan blossomed time
of dandelion metamorphic rose,
I am never tasted by the moment
when the rain runs it's lips across my furrowed brow of youth.
And everybody knows that there's no consolation prize
for last place.

Intangible screams
hang themselves from teardrop earrings,
dangling still heart, pewter by sorrow suckle skin.
I believe so much
I've stopped hoping,
I plead so much
knees bleed insane stones.

Though there's always light
at the end of the dark,
I've passed that point long ago
that even my scars have scars
and eyes are blind echoed
of prayers inaudible.

But, don't worry, my friend,
it's alright,
I'll go on heaving a smile,
and you'll never see the sound
that I was dead
before I cried.

By Melissa P. Monette



[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (05-16-2002 12:18 AM).]

© Copyright 2002 Melissa P. Long-Monette - All Rights Reserved
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(BIG HUGGGSSSSSSSS) Oh Melissa, this brought teats to my eyes reading this, sweet friend, my heart cries out to your pain, but yes, leave it all behind you and let it be deaf to the path ahead, for you have much to look forward too and there is deaf while here is 20/20! (kiss on cheek) This is powerful, sweet friend, I love it, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Melissa, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

knightlyshadows
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2 posted 05-16-2002 12:23 AM       View Profile for knightlyshadows   Email knightlyshadows   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for knightlyshadows

wow this was powerfully strong. I loved the line about you going on 'heaving a smile' and this bit:
I've passed that point long ago
that even my scars have scars
and eyes are blind echoed
of prayers inaudible.

excellenty written. This is going to my library.
-tiff

“A single choice can build destinies,or destroy them.”

I know Im not perfect but I can smile
& I hope that you c this heart behind my tired eyes

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But, don't worry, my friend,
it's alright,
I'll go on heaving a smile,
and you'll never see the sound
that I was dead
before I cried.

I love this poem, Honeybee...its so deep and can have so many different meanings

~lots of hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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4 posted 05-16-2002 01:04 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

Mellibee, your metaphors are showing beautifully!

   ~ Carpe' Diem ~

Dark Stranger
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oh yeah...
damn I like this set of dishes
well done mel'ss
BloomingRose
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Melissa,
This is full of power and raw emotions.
Hope you are ok, and this is just some powerful writing going on.

Hugs,
Deb
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I am no swan blossomed time
of dandelion metamorphic rose,
================================

I plead so much
knees bleed insane stones.
===============================


Ya got some clever, unique and powerful images here Melis...love the words play and metaphor as well.
Keep exploring these themes and metaphors...
you keep finding new ways to define your poetry.
well done girlie.

How long can a girl be haunted by you ...
Soon I'll grow up and I wont even flinch at your name.

Alanis Morissette

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8 posted 05-16-2002 08:25 AM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Melissa,
You have so many good lines I couldn't pick one out. A depressingly good write.
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Ah Melybee...how you write...
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A sadly powerful write
You are SO good
Enchantress
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Melissa, you are SO good!
This is a very powerful and profound write.
Excellent!
~hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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I gotta say, as bad a mood as yr in right now, it's gotten y' to write a great diatribe of angst! I love the thing about metamorphic roses and teardrop earrings.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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yes. . . let it flow. . . I like the images here. . . they make you stop and look at them a second time. . . even when you don't want to. . .

excellent work. . .

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Honeybee
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Thank you all...your support and praise means the world to me, and, it seems that all my muse wants to write these days are darker poems.  But, I do thank you for being patient with my melancholy and for understanding that I'm addicted to highly exaggerated themes, images and metaphors.  I'm just trying to better myself as a poet  


"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~


[This message has been edited by Melissa Honeybee (05-17-2002 12:25 AM).]

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...and bettering yourself you are doing. If dark poetry is what brings the feelings out, by all means stick with it. I know inside you are a bubbly, happy-go-lucky kid waiting for Tarzan to appear
hoot_owl_rn
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Oh...this one weeps of its own with sadness.
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17 posted 09-04-2002 01:30 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Honeybee,
The intelligence of this piece
made me smile. (and it wasn't
heaved)

Mike
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God, how sad! I enjoyed the read.
 
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