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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-05-15 01:54 PM


She smells of cinnamon fields.
I dance by her fire.
I dance to her sun.

The cool root-wet of morning.
I find reflected fire
upon her meadow pond.

I dance by her scent.
I dance to her morning.
I dance in her song.

I place smalling candle
into her poplar branches.
How she looks in bloom of dawn.

She smells of cinnamon fields.
Smoke curl my graining moon tonight.
I am her one.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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1 posted 2002-05-15 02:41 PM



Great imagery: "I place smalling candle"...I LIKE that line...may have to borrow it....

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2 posted 2002-05-15 02:46 PM


Michael....love this....great lines and phrases here.  Wonderful imagery.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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3 posted 2002-05-15 04:06 PM


Why, thank y' both.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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4 posted 2002-05-15 07:26 PM


Hello bsquirrel

I enjoyed this so very much.  I loved the images and fragrance portrayed through your words.

Take care......Sue

Suetang

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5 posted 2002-05-15 07:37 PM


Thanks, Sue. I'm glad you enjoyed my words.

Mike

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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6 posted 2002-05-17 01:15 AM


I love this....and the images....you have a very striking way about your words sir...NICE...


Lauren~

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one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

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7 posted 2002-05-17 01:20 AM


She smells of cinnamon fields.
Smoke curl my graining moon tonight.
I am her one.

Lovely words and gorgeous imagery, Mr.Squirrel.

~cinnamon hugs

Lyra

copyright2002 Lyra Nesius

"poetry is life distilled"  Gwendolyn Brooks

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8 posted 2002-05-17 05:12 AM


stunning imagery, If I said you fill up my senses would it be too much?
Keth

Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind.  Unknown



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9 posted 2002-05-17 09:37 AM


Mike, this is so great! have really missed reading lately...things here are so crazy. Probably will be for another month or two, easy....
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10 posted 2002-05-17 12:56 PM


Nah, I can live with all yr praise, easy. And SEA, ah've missed y', so glad t' see you pokin' yr head in every now and again. Hope things level out for y' soon.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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11 posted 2002-05-17 06:25 PM


So sensory!  Delicious!
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12 posted 2002-05-17 06:31 PM


I'm glad y' enjoyed, Martie.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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13 posted 2002-05-17 08:28 PM


Mike darling boy what a sensuous and beautiful piece this is, it delights my eyes, and tickles my senses with visions of heat and fire. Never do you fail to show your artistry and superb form in writing. Utterly utterly fabulous writing skills. You have to know I utterly utterly love this one

Exquisite darling boy absolutely exquisite.


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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14 posted 2002-05-18 02:59 PM


A tip of the hat to you, Mushy.

Mike

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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