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Dreams of a Goddess - serenity's dream challenge

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There is a secret I would share
of Heaven's hand on history,
about someone beyond compare,
a goddess masked in mystery.

She burst her pedestal apart,
bare feet upon warm Earth again,
as she-god with immortal heart
stepped down to roam this world of men.

Her eyes and hair like polished wood,
with skin as of the highest cloud.
Her innocence, misunderstood,
concealed her pasts within a shroud.

She took a name, so many names,
to hide immortal silhouette -
as Eve and Helen of Greek fame,
as Cleopatra and Annette.

Her visage shines throughout all time,
as lasting as the universe,
a hill too steep to ever climb,
her beauty both our boon and curse.

Lives were given, and lives were lost,
and many more forever changed.
No one could count the final cost
of countless empires rearranged.

I met this goddess years ago,
in her latest incarnation.
She stole my heart, took half my soul,
and taught me of new temptations.

Four summers passed in goddess arms,
four winters spent in her embrace,
four years enshrined by lover's charms,
until she left without a trace.

She took my name, and so much more,
with other names we can't forget:
Eve, Helen of Hellenic lore,
Cleopatra and - my Annette.

My past is now just memory,
of perfect days I bade farewell,
of a goddess who once loved me
when stepped she from her pedestal.

Yet not a night has passed since then
or so I guess it always seems,
but what my goddess comes again
to share her kisses in my dreams.

Her phantom lips touch mine each night,
my hands reach for an empty space,
and when I wake, tears blur my sight
of love once found and not replaced.

No one I've met before or since
can move her shadow from my bed.
No one I've met can yet convince
my heart - that part of it is dead.

I loved a goddess, she loved me,
there's little more that I can tell.
I'm in love with just a memory
- high atop her new pedestal.

© Copyright 2002 Ron Carnell - All Rights Reserved
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Challenge beautifully met Ron!
I did the challenge too but yours is way better!
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Ron~

Very lovely indeed..... I know serenity will be just thrilled....


Lauren~

I would rather have one breath of his hair,
one kiss of his mouth,
one touch of his hand
than an eternity without it.

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I am speechless. Such a Goddess exists in this earthly realm? This poem is incredibly beautiful.
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and THIS is why we think so highly of you, Ron.
-Dave
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My past is now just memory,
of perfect days I bade farewell,
of a goddess who once loved me
when stepped she from her pedestal.

Talk about a natural high.  There's gonna be no living with her now!  Ahhh...a goddess' persuasion.

[This message has been edited by Duncan (05-13-2002 12:13 AM).]

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A story, a heart, a poem, a man..all beautiful!
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7 posted 05-13-2002 01:19 AM       View Profile for Mysteria   Email Mysteria   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Mysteria

How sad.  Once you start believing that something is that perfect it will never be replaced, and there is so much lost in the time wasted comparing.  What a lesson in poetry this was Ron, and when you said one time that rhyme came natural to you as speaking, you weren't kidding, as this was flawless. Very much enjoyed, and I think you met Serenity's challenge very well.

We should spend less time worrying about when our life is going to end and more on when it's going to start!

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amazing what begging and groveling can get a man to do......nicely done, Ron
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Very nicely done here.
Very thought-out, I'd say it is a challenge well met I don't read much from you, it is a welcome change

Jenn

Why is it that we are at our most ingenius only when trying to destroy the things that keep us alive and thriving?

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First? Ha!

THANK YOU!!!!!



And? I just KNEW...smiling acthoo....this is beautiful...and of course! A God would dream of a Goddess! *smacking my head at my own stupiditiy* ow...oh man, I'm beside myself...Anybody ever tell you, YOU CAN WRITE???? OH. YEAH. Of course they did. sigh...heart*thump*heart*thump

and now...listen to your applause!!!

Thank you Ron, you are a wonderful sport, and a fantastic poet...heh heh, welcome to your own forum!
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An excellent piece of work from from beginning to end.
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What a beautifully flowing piece Ron. Flawless in rhyme and meter, with sentiments that reach into the depth of love and loss, to draw out the deepest of emotions. Few are given the opportunity to love with such intensity ... but you have captured this emotion with equal strength through your words. An excellent write ... so wonderful to read you. Challenge exeptionally well met.

Best wishes and hugs,
/Kit
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To see you write makes me smile with all of my heart.  This is a wonderful piece, my ever dearest friend.

You've spoken from your own innermost poetic heart - a very, very special place.  Would that we could always communicate poetically..

YOU are very special indeed...
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It's not often we get to read your works, and treasured are the times we see them...how wonderful for you to take time out just to share this part of you with us...

thank you for the Keeper...

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BRAVO!!! Oh Ron, this is absolutely wonderful, sweet friend, this is sad but is filled with such a love that is strong and can never die deep in the heart of him! (big hugggssssss) We have all missed your wonderful words so much, sweet friend, I hope you post more often for you are a delight to us all, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Ron, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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Dear Ron~
This is so breathtakingly beautiful, I was captivated by the words and the imagery they produced, amazingly sad yet beautiful poem...thanks for sharing
~HUGS~
Tracie

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It is the harmony of the universe


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Ron, Tis not often we have the pleasure of reading your work.  But, you sure make it worth waiting for. This is pure magic!
~Thank you, and hugs poet sir!~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

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You write em good Ron...James
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As all have said, this work is exceptional. But I see into it and see your pain. Perhaps it's time to find your Goddess and stand side by side on pedestals that are not so high?

I'm so glad you let serenity 'tease' you into posting. We miss you around here - you're the reason most of us are here you know.
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She burst her pedestal apart,
bare feet upon warm Earth again,
as she-god with immortal heart
stepped down to roam this world of men.

Her eyes and hair like polished wood,
with skin as of the highest cloud.
Her innocence, misunderstood,
concealed her pasts within a shroud.

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Add my name to the list of those above who thank Karen for this chance to get to read your work...and to learn from it as well.
This is a cadenced kissed treat to read aloud and the perfect answer to her challenge.
waaay cool
jm

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There comes a point when youre not sure why youre still talking...
I passed that point long ago

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I enjoyed reading your work Ron...lovely words indeed...hope to read more from you

                     ~Victoria


"If music be the food of love, play on."  (William Shakespeare)


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Ron, it has been far too long since I have read your work.  You are truly a master at bringing a poem to life.  

You bring back many memories of how your poetry inspired me in so many ways when we first met with this work.

Michael
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Thanks for coming down from Olympus to share this with us.

She said burn ... together.
-TON

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On May 8, 1975, after a month of flirting with romance, I invited Annette to accompany me to the annual Tulip Festival in Holland, Michigan. It was a short drive, but we ended up staying three days. We were married eighteen months later and moved to San Diego together in 1978. I haven't seen or talked to Annette since 1984, and in California it was easy to let this month pass without notice. Since returning to Michigan, though, May inevitably brings local announcements of how the Holland tulips are faring and my memories are just as inevitably stirred. This year, the timing of Karen's challenge caused it to also be stirred into the same nostalgic blend.

Thanks, my friends, for all the kind words. Lacking the talent of some of our more prolific writers, I usually spend longer than one day on a poem and this one probably deserves more of my effort. Someday, I'll try to finish it.

Possibly next May?
 
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