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Corinne
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0 posted 2002-05-12 07:20 PM



On Princes and Ponds

Today my closest friend and I
walked around Carmen lake.
It was ripe with springtime life –
goslings and their hissing parents,
dancing dragonflies,
redwing blackbirds guarding nests,
and cattails burgeoning.

We used to stroll like this,
but since I’ve moved away,
it’s a missed treat.

We speak of men.
We always speak of men -
whether we made the right choices;
picking out flaws we would have erased
like stick figure imperfections in pencil.

We wonder too, about the one that got away.

On a foot bridge,
there was a young girl fishing.
As we walked by,
she caught something;
I moved to get a closer look.
She’d hooked a huge frog.
It flung itself wildly away from the line.

My friend tried to lure me away,
but the girl seemed helpless,
so I reached in, took hold of the taut nylon,
pulled the frog in.

Once he was in my left hand,
he didn’t struggle.
The hook had snared
though both sides of his mouth
and as I gently pulled,
the barb resisted.

One last tug, and it came away.
I set him down,
he splashed back into the pond.

My friend commented
that I should have taken my chances
and kissed the damn frog.

© 2002 Corinne Bailey

[This message has been edited by Corinne (05-12-2002 07:27 PM).]

© Copyright 2002 Corinne - All Rights Reserved
Sunshine
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1 posted 2002-05-12 07:21 PM



You do make me laugh!  And where in the world but at Passions would I come across the word goslings twice in two days?  ROTF...thanks for this, Corinne!  I needed it more than I knew!

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2 posted 2002-05-12 07:22 PM


Wonderful!  I like the way you describe your talks with your friend, how you are able to express your doubts to one another.
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3 posted 2002-05-12 07:29 PM




(giggles in delight) Hey, I always wonder who ever thought up that saying anyway, this is such a cute poem and yay for the frog and getting free! (smiles) This is soooooo beautiful, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Corinne, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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4 posted 2002-05-13 08:35 AM


I must confide that it never worked for ME...but like your friend? I always figured,
"What the hell?"

This is funny, but the friendship is apparent throughout. A joy to read you this morning, Corinne!

Parker
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5 posted 2002-05-13 11:20 AM


wasn't expecting the last line.... thanks for the smile. sweet poet.

Park

Corinne
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6 posted 2002-05-13 11:30 AM


Thank you, Sunshine, Macha, Noah, Serenity and Park!

Corinne

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7 posted 2002-05-13 11:36 AM


Corinne,
You couldn't kiss that frog, he was already hooked. LOL

Toerag
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8 posted 2002-05-13 03:07 PM


Hey Corinne, do ya remember that one I wrote on the Adult forum 'bout you and me and the "Pond That Has no ripples?"
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9 posted 2002-05-13 03:09 PM


that last line was perfect Corinne. . . just the kind of surprise that I like from you. . .

thanks. . .

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To the world, you may only be one person. But to one person, you may be the world.

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10 posted 2002-05-13 03:10 PM


Yr words astound me and make me smile at the same time. A rare gift. Thanks for sharin' it.

<--the frog after bein' caught too many times?

She said burn ... together.
-TON

Elizabeth Cor
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11 posted 2002-05-13 11:54 PM


~grin~ but this is cynical too... a stroll with a ricochet ending (and a note to your kindness, reflexive or not).

[This message has been edited by Elizabeth Cor (05-13-2002 11:56 PM).]

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12 posted 2002-05-14 12:28 PM


Oh man, don't you just hate to miss the chance!!  Could picture this, and enjoyed it so much!  A bad day fishing is worth a frog in the pond!  
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13 posted 2002-05-14 03:46 PM


Thanks, Sey - ahhhhh, you so funny!

Toe - how could I forget, darlin'?

Sven - thank you, kind sir!

bsquirrel - how cute, thanks!

Elizabeth Cor - you're always so kind, thank you!

Blues - ain't that the truth! Thanks!

Corinne

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14 posted 2002-05-15 10:11 AM


I read this a couple of days ago, but my commenting time was almost non-existent. *S* But it's worth a repeat visit... I love the ending! *S*
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15 posted 2002-05-15 11:16 PM



Corrine, I really like this reflective stream of consciousness piece from you.  I'd say that it's your best to date. I relate very much so and I loved the last stanza.  I'm keeping this one~

Take care,
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

Corinne
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16 posted 2002-05-16 09:53 AM


Suthern, thanks for second read, that was sweet of you!

Melissa - how kind you are, thank you!

Cor

Martie
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17 posted 2002-05-16 11:58 AM


Corinne

I loved this walk with you and your friend, the frog.  

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18 posted 2002-05-16 01:44 PM


Corinne, this is wonderful and so refreshing!
I think I would have probably kissed the dang thing
just to see what would happen!
*I'd probably end up with a bad case of warts!*
Fun read dear poetess!
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Corinne
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19 posted 2002-05-16 04:18 PM


Thanks Martie and Enchantress!

Cor

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20 posted 2002-05-16 06:19 PM


Corinne....AWWWW NAWWWW....shoot!

You missed your big chance.....

Loved this poem....the imagery and the
ending was hilarious....

RMW
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21 posted 2002-05-16 07:32 PM


"It's not easy being green". Nicely done.
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