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DonFurr
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Monticello IN

0 posted 2002-05-12 03:26 AM


Morning sees me
not much any more
Through into sunlight
I'll not open the door

My last morning was bright
and pleasing to the eye
Wakening with a lover
all brown with natures dye

Walking to home that eve
distracted by a scent
One sweet and comanding
but not heaven sent

Eyes clear as and locks
as if of spun rain
If they hadn't been empty
I'd have see the pain

Longing has come and
and mourning does too
my loss is completed
when thinking of you

Now I aviod the sunlight
the least little speck
And let no-one see the
twin scars on my neck


© Copyright 2002 Don Furr - All Rights Reserved
serenity blaze
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since 2000-02-02
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1 posted 2002-05-12 06:44 AM


gotta love that last verse...I know the bite of a blood sucker myself!

I like this alot...it could be really gothic, too, if you dressed it up in drag a bit!
and...
I can't say I see you here often, but perhaps you just don't reflect in mirrors?



enjoyed, much!


Munda
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2 posted 2002-05-14 03:48 PM


Enjoyed.
Mother_Earth
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3 posted 2002-05-14 08:39 PM


DonFurr, you write "sad" real good.  Very good,  ME
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just out of reach
4 posted 2002-05-14 09:07 PM


Yikes!! Good one!! Enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

Enchantress
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Canada eh.
5 posted 2002-05-14 10:23 PM


Way cool write Don.
Loved the ending.
~Hugs~

~Somewhere in my heart I'm always
dancing with you in the summer rain~

Suetang
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since 2001-03-07
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6 posted 2002-05-14 10:37 PM


Hello Don

I really enjoyed this and will look forward to more from you.

Take care......Sue

Suetang

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7 posted 2002-05-15 03:26 AM


if you wanna get me going, write sad ones...


OK...I'm going!

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