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Tim
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0 posted 2002-05-11 11:23 PM


I looked out the window,
...to see what I could see,
Because of pane's reflection,
...I only could see me.
I thought perhaps a piece of cloth,
...would clear the window's glass,
But still the pane's reflection,
...prevented my look's pass.
I put on colored glasses,
...to dampen window's glare,
But alas, stayed pane's reflection,
...as only I was there.
I had no plan, no course of action,
...to what I would do next,
So in my chambers there I sat,
...alone, sad and perplexed.
Then I heard a gentle wind,
...call through the window's pane,
Open wide and let me in,
...called out the wind's refrain.
I was afraid of unknown wind,
...I knew not what to do,
So I kept the window closed,
...did not let wind come through.
So my reflection ever stays,
...and ever do I see,
In the window in the pane,
...me and only me.

[This message has been edited by Tim (05-12-2002 12:17 AM).]

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Midnitesun
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1 posted 2002-05-12 01:58 AM


Wow, this is really good, Tim. I'd sure open that window....wide open.
"Then I heard a gentle wind,
...call through the window's pane,
Open wide and let me in,
...called out the wind's refrain.
I was afraid of unknown wind,
...I knew not what to do,
So I kept the window closed,
...did not let wind come through"


Sunshine
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2 posted 2002-05-12 07:55 AM



Darned glass...excellent write!

Muys
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3 posted 2002-05-12 11:21 AM


Wow'I don't like The wind
I am old 'he blow me down.
Nice poem Tim
Muys

Martie
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4 posted 2002-05-12 12:05 PM


Tim

very interesting and thoughtful writing.  Always a pleasure to read you, my friend.

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5 posted 2002-05-12 12:20 PM


Tim...superbly written....flow and rhyme
were/are perfection....very nicely done.

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6 posted 2002-05-12 02:07 PM


loved it!

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7 posted 2002-05-12 02:34 PM


Tim darling boy this is utterly utterly perfect, do I like it? I love it. Your writingis always excellent. No one writes quite the same as you do darling heart, and this is a perfect Not only is it well written, it holds the form perfectly. Absolutely excellent


Love and warm stuff
As always
Mushy

To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79


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