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kaile
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0 posted 2002-05-10 02:01 AM


In the streets of an unfamiliar land,
while the gang was bargaining
strategically with calculators
and warm gracious smiles,
I felt my stomach rumble

Not wanting to
distract them
from their merry-making,
I thought I would and could endure
(after all, I was army-trained)

Until my face contorted
into a strange mixture
of agony, wimpy grins
and an act-tough noncommittal look

and I wabbled out
from the shop,
doing a mean impersonation
of Donald Duck

the first word you have
to learn in a foreign land is "toilet"
but i guess my linguistic lapse
was compensated by my frantic dashing
to the backs of shops and
leaving abruptly for the next

while my poor companion tried to
catch up and enlighten the bemused

some angels finally gave directions
and i wobbled and wabbled my way
to the bowl~my saviour,
trying not to exert too much energy
in case.....(you know)

i kept my head down
for the rest of the night

[This message has been edited by faterider (05-10-2002 02:01 AM).]

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serenity blaze
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1 posted 2002-05-10 02:10 AM


(after all, I was army-trained)


HUGE smile? lol

um, well, y'lightened MY load a bit tonight!
heh.
Thanks so much...and don't think I don't know that this is indeed very rich...


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2 posted 2002-05-10 07:33 AM


I don't know what to say, I'm speechless! This is unreal! Great write!

Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S

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3 posted 2002-05-10 08:40 AM




BRAVO!!! Wow, this is wonderful, sweet friend, I just love the wonderful words you weave together, sweet friend, such intensity and cadence fills your voice in this reply, I LOVE IT!!! (BIG HUGGGSSSSS) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Heng, thank youn for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

Joe Lamando
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4 posted 2002-05-10 08:50 AM


Great story!  I love happy endings! Nothing like tension and relief. (;-)

Joe Lamando

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5 posted 2002-05-10 02:24 PM


This is really funny! I thought you were hungry when you said your stomach rumbled. And then you said "Toilet"...

It's OK, just nature's call. Just keep your head low for the time being.

_,,,^.^,,,_
Florence

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6 posted 2002-05-11 12:14 PM


Great write, faterider...and its true, when visiting any foreign country, the first words you should learn are "where's the bathroom?"
~ear to ear hugs for this one

Lyra

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Lisann
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7 posted 2002-05-12 11:28 PM


this was very funny faterider......I wasn't planning on putting mine into a poem...but, I think I'll give it a shot....hehhehehehehe
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8 posted 2002-05-13 12:00 PM


LOL, this one jogged my memory banks, and yes, when traveling abroad, you need to learn all that WC (water closet)jargon.
"Montezuma's revenge" or "the traveler's trots."  HAHA. You are so funny!

kaile
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9 posted 2002-05-13 12:09 PM


thanx all for reading..and Lisann, go for it! i will be waiting...
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