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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC 
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Cool Detachment why after all this time did you call, what did you expect to achieve? did you honestly think your lies once again i'd believe? your cool detachment didn't trick me, for you and I both know what is true you say that you still love me, but did it ever occur that i no longer love you years ago, you and i were together, but that is in the past i now have a love that i cherish, something i KNOW will last once our lives were so meshed together, i didn't know how you could really be but then you dropped your guard...the day you hit me is the first time i began to see you weren't the loving woman i had first met, you changed into something new i'm not sure what happened, whether i grew up, or i just outgrew you years passed, you just left without even a note to say goodbye in the years you were gone, i dried my tears, a smile replaced the way i use to cry i watch you from under my eyelashes, you don't even know im doing this for a moment i remember what it use to be like...it's a time i honestly don't miss did you ever love me, or were all the years just a lie it's time to let us both go, time to say goodbye you've held onto me far too long, you come around just when i think you're gone i changed the radio, i no longer play our favorite song i was just a kid when we were together, you older, i thought you knew it all but when the chips fell, you weren't there to catch my fall i hit the ground, that hard ground, and the tears came down i looked for you, but you were nowhere around only when i picked myself up, and began my life through a new door did you come back asking me for a chance once more time passed us by, we are different people, i'm a woman now, no longer the child you use to know the winds changed, and i changed with them...never will i forget though you were my first love, but our love faded for a reason it's time for you to let go...you and i passed into a different season "you can't stop the rain from pouring down can't stop the world from turning 'round can't stop me from loving you no matter what you do" [This message has been edited by Aimster (05-09-2002 04:59 PM).] |
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
"i'm not sure what happened, whether i grew up, or i just outgrew you" how could I not LOVE this line....Amy your strength shines sweetie  awesome poem  |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Amy darling lil sis of my heart Oh my stars how utterly utterly wonderful is this write of yours. YOU darling girl are a writer a really fabulous writer I love it, the flow is divine the form pretty near perfect, it’s beautiful the truth shining in this is plain. The memories stirred by a long ago love and you’ve revealed them in stark clarity. Wonderful writing darling girl simply wonderful   Love and warm stuff As always Mushy  To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Amy, this is sooooo sad but powerful, sweet friend, I am so happy you had the strength to write this and I hope now you have found your true love who will never dare to hurt you like before! (sigh) This is sad but fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Amy, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Lovem Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Saunni Senior Member
since 2000-07-11
Posts 1777West Virginia |
Hey, Aim, incredible, heart touching and emotional write here! But, very proud of you that you stood your ground! Be happy where you are, Girl! Did I mention this is a great write?Sauni:)The Only Time I See The Sun Is When I'm Within That Vanilla Breeze.The Only Time I'm One With The Sun Is When He Shelters Me From The Rain. L.S |
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andEmmamakes3 Member
since 2002-05-11
Posts 66Kent |
Amy Hi there it’s Emma here I’m the youngest of Mushy’s daughters. I’ve been trying to join for weeks but not been able too and now I can so I did. Mum will now have to wait her turn patiently. As I’ve had to do for weeks while Krissy has been having fun in the forum. I definitely don’t write poems. I have been an admirer of your writing for simply ages and have finally got the chance to say how much I do love it. Your writing has a very real quality something very special about it. You are a very good writer.  lots of love Emma Eternity, stands laughing at old time |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Amy, I think you did both...grew up and outgrew.. And I do know that you said it well and bravely too... |
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