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When An Old Man Dies...more than a challenge
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When An Old Man Dies...more than a challenge |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines 
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When An Old Man Dies There he was, not the man I use to run up to be swept into his arms to sit on his lap and listen to an accent of far away once upons. How when a small child he crossed the ocean alone to meet up with his family to feel the freedom of the waves before reaching our shores. How he met her, fell in love saw the first electric light, transportation's evolution, war after war and his children's participation and return. There he was, laying like a child, curled in a fetal position, the last time I saw him, waiting for someone, anyone to read his mind, to know that inside he was volumes, knowledge beyond imagination. He was feelings, more than you could see unless you looked into his eyes and in their depths you saw the pain of knowing. His knowing that everything was inside and there no longer was a key to unlock it, and if there were, by some magic, what other exciting experiences would he have whispered in my wanting ears. If only he knew ahead of time that the only pages of his life to be handed down were those from his lips only, maybe, just maybe I would have been enlightened by the many more that could be seen needing release from pleading eyes. M a memory or two...of my last visit with my grandfather who was born in the 1880's "Love is not blind - It sees more and not less, but because it sees more, it is willing to see less." (Will Moss) [This message has been edited by nakdthoughts (05-08-2002 02:20 PM).] |
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serenity blaze Member Empyrean
since 2000-02-02
Posts 27738 |
Maureen...THANK YOU... so beautiful...and every life lived is worth the turn of the page... thank you, so much, for sharing this with us. When an old man dies? I want to read every book! Gracious writing, m'friend. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
I was reading your challenge and I too, thought it can't be competed with the first response, but in actuality no one can compete with each other on this topic for every one will be a memory of someone they know, knew or loved...and to each it will be their best of thoughts...no matter how the words come down.. Thank you Karen for a chance to think about someone special to me. *s M |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 (big hugggssssss) Oh Maureen, this is sooooo beautifully heartfelt, sweet friend, this is such a compassionate dedication to your loving grandfather, who I know will always love you so much and will always be blessed to have you in his heart! (sigh) You are a true angel, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Maureen, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
waiting for someone, anyone to read his mind, to know that inside he was volumes, knowledge beyond imagination. This was very moving and brought back memories of my grandfather and great grandfather, both which I miss dearly. Enjoyed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
~M~ I love this, very touching.... but one Q' ''M a memory or two...of my last visit with my grandfather who was born in the 1980's''???? Lauren~ I Know Why The Caged Bird Sings Could I have been anyone other than me True poems rest between the words Give hope a chance to float, it will [This message has been edited by Greeneyes (05-08-2002 02:13 PM).] |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Lauren thank you..I guess I am having a hard enough time remembering we are in the 2000's let alone remembering the 1800's *s Noah thank you, and Chris..happy memories I hope *s thank you all M |
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Kethry Member Rara Avis
since 2000-07-29
Posts 9082Victoria Australia |
M, you painted such a vivid picture my heart was wrenched. Don't cry for the library burning though, rejoice that you were able to borrow his books thoughout his lifetime. Keth Here in the midst of my lonely abyss, a single joy I find...your presence in my mind. Unknown |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
M. I am very impressed with the personal depth that you put into this poem....Keep this one, treasure it for all time... |
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Madame Chipmunk Member Rara Avis
since 2001-12-05
Posts 8296Michigan |
Barry is right, Maureen...this one is a treasure, and you are right about the challenge...no one could compete with this memory, its way too precious.  ~treasured hugsLyra |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Maureen, this piece is as priceless as the memories of him you have shared so graciously. ~Hugs~ |
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Gentle Spirit Member Patricius
since 2000-10-09
Posts 13989 |
yep, those memories, those feelings.....dont ever give em up Maur.......never. Thsi is so great and even tho dad wasn't that old it sure made me remember.....but in a good way. huggies to you too. Like a red brick, |
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ThisDiamond Member Rara Avis
since 2002-02-22
Posts 9353Michigan, USA |
How beautiful the words you find and paint with. ThisDiamond |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
Thank you for reading and responding and I thank Serenity for bringing the feelings out of me *s M |
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