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Sending Your Love Out To Sea
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Sending Your Love Out To Sea |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia 
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 You abandoned my heart And left its door open wide You didn't seem to care How much I was hurting inside I took solace at the seaside Cold winds chilled me to the bone Our love is all washed up now Since you left me here alone We once walked this beach together As two lovers hand in hand Back then there were two sets of footprints That followed behind us on the sand I stand here lost in my memories Salty tears now sting my eyes I cannot believe you betrayed me As you traded my love for lies My quest for love is not over Just because our love has soured For you will never break my spirit As I grow stronger by the hour For I refuse to be defeated As I cast your love out to sea My sadness will only be fleeting From you my soul has broken free Next time I'll be more wary When love comes knocking on my door My eyes will see more clearly I won't be used like I was before Suetang [This message has been edited by Suetang (05-08-2002 12:19 AM).] |
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SmittenKitten Senior Member
since 2001-06-20
Posts 1131where the sky and horizon meet |
Suetang~  Yes! There is such determination and hope in this and it's all wrapped up in a flowing, and perfectly rhyming style. Wonderful!*hugs* ~Krista  Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself. |
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Sunshine
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
quote: Yes! I hear music in this one! |
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JamesMichael Member Empyrean
since 1999-11-16
Posts 33336Kapolei, Hawaii, USA |
Excellent...James |
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catalinamoon
since 2000-06-03
Posts 9543The Shores of Alone |
Sue, there are so many lines I like here, I can't choose just one or two. All I can say is I know this feeling, and you said it just the way it feels. Beautiful picture too, is that a beach you know? Sandra |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
  (smiles) Oh Sue, this is soooooo beautifully heartfelt, sweet friend, I'm sorry everything didn't work out the first time around but I know you will find all your heart desires and as long as you follow your heart you can never go wrong! (kiss on cheek) This is breathtaking, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Sue, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Dulcinea Senior Member
since 2001-07-22
Posts 774IN |
Very well written Sue! I admire the conviction and determination in this, I know you will find the love you truly need one day! Wonderful job! |
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Bridget Shenachie Senior Member
since 2002-01-23
Posts 1056Kansas USA |
Very well said. I hope that you are writing from another persona. Shenachie |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
I too hope this is not you writing about YOU! This poem has guts, a lot of em. I like it a lot...Very well done, Sue... |
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Suetang Member Ascendant
since 2001-03-07
Posts 5187Melbourne, Australia |
Thank you all for your wonderful comments. I must confess I stepped into someone elses shoes when writing this one as I so often do. I'm glad my words moved you enough to think that it may have been about me. Take care......Sue Suetang |
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