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Iambe's Point of View

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SmittenKitten
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where the sky and horizon meet


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Posted with permission and encouragement from Ron (Cpat Hair).

Iambe's Point of View

I see Sol's old truck
Bouncing my way
It coughs when he turns
The ignition
Kind of like Sol
When I ask him to dance

I keep my hands busy
On Bob's old Ford
Knowing that it's
Something else entirely
I'd like to get my hands on

I watch Sol from the
Corner of my eye
Leaning down in the cab
I can see where the line
Of his hair now ends

I drop my wrench
And the clamber causes
Sol to look my way
His sad eyes meet mine
And as the dust
On the road settles
So does the dust
On my heart

It seems we will always
dance this tune.

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.††
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

© Copyright 2002 Krista C. - All Rights Reserved
Elan
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You seem to be capturing Iambe's essence...
keep it up!
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sitting here with frank admiration, K.

I tried to do this, and just couldn't. Hmm...you've got me wanting to try again.

Great job with this. It was good to hear Iambe's point of view. (I'm sure Ron enjoyed it too.)
Dark Stranger
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you do wonders smitty kitty
can see you there
with the grease on your nose

wish you were into harley's
(grin)
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Krista darling girl this is awesome and so beautifully written. And you know it is true you write and Iím stunned you make it look easy when I know itís not. You are truly an awesome writer do I love this? YOU know I do itís superb. Utterly utterly wonderful


Love and warm stuff
As always
Slushy


To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79

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Wow!  Wait 'til Ron sees this.  He will be proud as can be

Well done, SK
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YAY!!! Oh Krista, this is beautiful, sweet friend, Ron always writes the most beautiful poems on lambe and now you too have the spirit of this wonderful character in you! (kiss on cheek) I know Ron is absolutely going to love this, sweet friend, I LOVE IT, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Krista, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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I drop my wrench
And the clamber causes
Sol to look my way
His sad eyes meet mine
And as the dust
On the road settles
So does the dust
On my heart

It seems we will always
dance this tune.
=======================

very very cool....yes...I too have become a huge fan of Rons Iambe writes...and this captures with a bittersweet delight the chemistry that he creates between his characters.
I enjoyed this muchly Krista-girlie...well done.
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Elan~ You should check out Open Poetry #14 to see the real goods.  Cpat Hair is the one that writes the Iambe series, I just borrowed the inspiration for a bit =)  Thank you for stopping in and encouraging!

K~ Awww   Thank you sweet poetess.  And I say, go for it!  I certainly enjoyed myself diving into Iambe for awhile =)

DS~ Who says I'm not?

Mushy~  There you go mushing up the place again! Thank you sweet lady, you always bring me smiles and warm stuff!  *hugs*

Interloper~  I emailed it to him before posting it as I didn't want to step on any toes!  But he was nothing but encouraging and kind =)  He is a wonderful teacher, whether he tries to be or not!
Thank you so much for the wow

SweetNoah~ A gazillion smiling thanks to you!  I wish I could bottle the bubbling kindness in your replies...I'd never have a bad day again!

Hugs to all of you!

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.††
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

SmittenKitten
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JM~ Hey, you snuck in on me while I was replying
I'll never even come close to creating the essence of the characters like he does, but it was so fun to try!  It was definitely an eye-opening experience...now I know I'm not limited to my own experiences!
Thank you for the fly by, it's always great to read your words.
*hugs*

  

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.††
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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This is a hard thing to do, and you did it well, SK.
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