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Janet Marie
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0 posted 05-06-2002 10:37 PM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Janet Marie

     "What are you so afraid of?" she questioned.

     "Everything," came the reply.

     "You haven't even scratched the surface yet,
you know you have to, and you know the reasons why."


     "I don't think I can go that deep ...
there are some secrets I need to keep.
Sometimes I don't want you reading my mind
and some things just cant be held by rhyme."

     "There was a time when we were the same mind ...
when you desperately needed the rhyme to define.
It rocked you like an abandoned child,
cadenced console from lonely running wild.
It kept you sane ... held you beguiled."


     "Some things are better left unsaid ...
left buried like the dead, left alone in my head.
Some things are better kept inside ...
you don't know the times I've tried,
you don't know the tears I've cried."

     "I know you better than you realize ...
after all, I see you through your own eyes.
With me there's no rejection ... I am your true reflection.
Yet from me, you now feel the need for protection?
You used to say I was the one who gave you direction."


     "What about the times you leave me behind?
Need I remind? It's you who takes my words away ...
where's the intentions of kind when you're gone to stay?
For now it's probably better this way,
for all the things I'm feeling these days ...
there'll be no right words to say."

     "Would it be too much for a hurting heart to conceive,
that the silence's true intent is meant as healing reprieve?
You need to believe in me like you did when we began.
You have to find a place to make your stand ...
even when I have to let go of your hand."


     "Why do you always need me to bleed?
You think I don't know that it's off my pain you feed?
Then you go away leaving me in quiet concede.
I'm tired of begging you for inspiration ...
tired of this desperation. I no longer feel the anticipation.
I cant live up to your expectations."

     "The only thing holding you back is you,
You need a different point of view. Ask yourself
how you got so lost while standing still?
Honesty comes with cost, the truth is a bitter pill."


     "Sometimes you ask for more than I have left to give,
the parts of me I cant forgive ... the pain I'd rather not relive."

     "Let's do this the way we have so many times before ...
walk with me through this last door.
What are you so afraid of?" (she inquired once more.)


     "Of never being inspired like that again ...
of never touching the warm, the way I did back then.
Of never quieting this ache that burns from within,
of never being loved again, the way I was when loved by him."

     "The inspiration will be yours again,
all you have to do is let me in ...
then trust again in your promised pen."


     "I'm not promising the words will always rhyme,
I have to find my own way this time."

     "That will always be your choice to decide,
the inspire ... is mine to provide.
From silent stirrings deep inside ...
is born a poet's versed voice in cadenced confide.
Let nothing nor no one try to turn this tide.
The tears ... they must be cried ...
the words ... must not ever be denied."



Janet Marie


~*~


"When your own emptiness is all that's getting through,
There comes a point when you're not sure why you're still talking ...
I passed that point long ago."

Now I'm sitting here wondering what to say
(That you might recognize)
Afraid that all these words might scare you away
(And break through the disguise)
No one ever talks about their feelings anyway ...
Without dressing them in dreams and laughter --
I guess it's just too painful otherwise."


~Jackson Browne~
from: Late For The Sky



... and I don't know why ...
Why should love come down and just sweep me away
I want to fly ... but there are so many things in my way.

J Browne


[This message has been edited by Janet Marie (05-07-2002 12:40 AM).]

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Martie
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Janet Marie

You have and did and will forever be an inspiration to me!!  This honest conversation with your muse is just an example of your poetic soul.  I love it, and you!!  
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2 posted 05-06-2002 10:47 PM       View Profile for Marge Tindal   Email Marge Tindal   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Marge Tindal's Home Page   View IP for Marge Tindal

JanetMarie~

"I don't think I can go that deep ...
there are some secrets I need to keep.
Sometimes I don't want you reading my mind
and some things just cant be held by rhyme."


I know you found inspiration that sent you reaching deeply for this purge~

Poignancy noted and feeling the touch~
Excellent, poetess~
*Hugs*
~*Marge*~


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Janet,

   You never stop amazing me.  I am always in awe of your words.  You don't know how much I truly enjoyed this, and how many parts seem like they came right out of my thoughts.

Hugs,
Tara

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     "I'm not promising the words will always rhyme,
I have to find my own way this time."


     "That will always be your choice to decide,
the inspire ... is mine to provide.
From silent stirrings deep inside ...
is born a poet's versed voice in cadenced confide.
Let nothing nor no one try to turn this tide ...
the tears ... they must be cried ...
the words ... must not ever be denied."
~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~~
Oh Janet Marie, it is so wonderful to be reading you again!  
And this write with you muse is so very very special!  
YOU dear poetess just made my day!
This is a keeper and into my library marked JM it goes.
~Big Hugs~  
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It's going to take me a while to soak this in.  But you know I'm reading and absorbing and feeling like the time when I sat in a movie theatre alone and the movie still played.  I even snuck a cigarette.  This is perfect, just like that.
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Yes, I know this conversation well. Particularly the part about not wanting to go too far into the thoughts and feelings beneath the surface. So nice to see your poetry on these pages again JM. Now that you and your muse have had this conversation, will we be seeing more soon? I sure hope so.

If she who dies with the most toys wins, then can I have some toy boys please?

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"The inspiration will be yours again,
all you have to do is let me in ...
then trust again in your promised pen."

     "I'm not promising the words will always rhyme,
I have to find my own way this time."

     "That will always be your choice to decide,
the inspire ... is mine to provide.
From silent stirrings deep inside ...
is born a poet's versed voice in cadenced confide.
Let nothing nor no one try to turn this tide ...
the tears ... they must be cried ...
the words ... must not ever be denied."




YES!!! YES!!! Oh Janet, this is outstanding, sweet friend, yes, we must always take a stand for ourselves even while the words we try to speak may sound mundane when we enunciate them, for if we never have anything to believe in, there is no course or no change in history and learning is what helps our hearts grow and teaches us to appreciate language and life so much more vividly! (kiss on cheek) This is awesome, sweet friend, this is a wonderful muse conversation, it feels so great to read your fabulous words again, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Janet, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton


"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

[This message has been edited by Mistletoe Angel (05-06-2002 11:09 PM).]

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     "Some things are better left unsaid ...
left buried like the dead, left alone in my head.
Some things are better kept inside ...
you don't know the times I've tried,
you don't know the tears I've cried."


You know, JM, that my attention span is limited, so I'll have to respond to this in pieces.

Don't ya hate it when they try to make you say more than you want to.  Won't leave ya safe, in the cacoon.
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"That will always be your choice to decide,
the inspire ... is mine to provide.
From silent stirrings deep inside ...
is born a poet's versed voice in cadenced confide.
Let nothing nor no one try to turn this tide ...
the tears ... they must be cried ...
the words ... must not ever be denied."


Yes!  I have been silenced before by negative thoughts and feelings...I wouldn't write because I didn't want to face those feelings.  Hopefully your muse is pushy enough to get you doing it anyway!

"No one ever talks about their feelings anyway ...
Without dressing them in dreams and laughter --
I guess it's just too painful otherwise."


Wow...that is so true....so sad.

I like the conversation style of this piece ~ chatting up your muse, that's a hilarious thought if you really think about it
I'm so glad to see you writing again.  Keep talking with your muse because I would certainly love to hear from you both some more!   
And now you give the rest of us poets a chance to shower you with comments like you do to us.  

*hugs sweet poetess*
~Krista

Your beautiful words & creativity allow me to connect with the same in myself.  
Thank you for having the courage to share yourself so that I can too

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Gawd, JM, how do you do it?!  This is a raw and honest purge, and I see bits of myself floating about the lines.  I've had many conversations with my muse and myself, yet they never compare to yours.  Excellent writing...

Take care
Melissa~

"Poetry is not an opinion expressed...
it is a song that rises from a bleeding
wound...or a smiling mouth"

~Kahlil Gibran~

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the words ... must not ever be denied."

This is a BRUISING read, me dear twin. (My turn to love the conversatinal format.)

The repartee stung--and I know how painful this must have been to write, but I also know the relief of having it written. You, among a few others, know the subject matter of what I've been working on lately. I wanted to share with you something, my "dear" friend asked, when he found me crying over the keyboard.

"Maybe you shouldn't...why do you want to do this to yourself? Why do you want to relive it all again?" And I said,

"Because I want it all, between the covers of a book, so that I can close it, and be done with it, and get the ugly INSIDE of me OUTSIDE of me, so that I can put it away for good, someplace else."

I love you baby. And I understand.


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This is why, we fly knowingly into the flame.
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"The only thing holding you back is you,
You need a different point of view. Ask yourself
how you got so lost while standing still?
Honesty comes with cost, the truth is a bitter pill."

Well...this was painful to say the least, but I think an exercise that probably had to be done, and like Karen said, I think it best to listen to your muse and get all of it out and over with so you can fly with intent.

How can I say this was sensational, when I feel an ache in my heart with this one?
((((hugs to my JM))))

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What if tomorrow never comes?

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Dear Heart,

The ache, the bitter truth, the pain, the letting go....is all there woven among these words, of you such a delicate heart....searching .....keeping flying sweet poetess.....you wil make a soft safe landing....love to you...much Peace too..


Lauren~

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Could I have been anyone other than me
True poems rest between the words
Give hope a chance to float, it will

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Janet Marie--

Wow!  I've thought some of these thoughts and it was a relief to see them so well expressed.

Thanks for posting this!

Shenachie
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Communication is good...especially thoughts from deep down in the heart...James
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JM, just a hug and some big shoulders
to a sweet lady...enjoyed your soul here

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No, no, not even the Moth can deny the words when she wears the wings of the Queen...

I wish your muse weren't so moody...it needs to be let out of the cedar chest more often...
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JM,
I read your wonderful sad write and can explain some but it is very involved. I will write you again later in the day. WWRS
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Thank you all for these kind replies, for the hugs and concerned Emails. Please be assured I am fine.(and I love you for the concern)
This was not as emotionally painful to write as the words must read ...(yes some parts were, and some losses seem impossible for me to move past) but I have learned, over time by the emotional reactions that I write "sadder" than I realize...but yes this was a necessary exploration. Needing to look deep and brutally honest at my struggle with writers block...or more so my not writing because I wont open my self up to new avenues,-- is of my own doing emotionally...as is the pressure I put on myself to only write at a certain level. (my own worst enemy and critic) And this is also about how I have come to feel restricted by writing in rhyme, where once it was second skin...putting rhyme to the voices in my head.   As a child...the rhyme offered comfort I couldn't understand back then..but sometimes it now seems to chain me.
Of late I have been enjoying writing in free verse more..my last several posts have been headed in that direction( even if far and few between)   But this time the rhyme could not be denied...the muse insisted.
We have to explore all the reasons behind our need to write..and why we sometimes cant, to understand and then grow as a poet. Yes, this is  a moth purge for sure..but I hope not taken as a "pity party."  For me personally...writing the emotions is what has always come the easiest no matter how sad, as I needed an outlet for these things I feel so intensely and often am owned by them...its containing them in a poetic way that has structure and form that is the hard part... as is brevity sometimes   and not writing with the cliche' pen too often) *S*
(Thank the poetic gods for alliterations and ellipses) *L*

thank you all...I appreciate your reading this long one when there is so much to read here.
my love and respect to poetry land
jm


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What are you so afraid of?" (she inquired once more.)

     "Of never being inspired like that again ...
of never touching the warm, the way I did back then.
Of never quieting this ache that burns from within,
of never being loved again, the way I was when loved by him."

Maybe the poetry isn't worth the pain.  Just wondering to myself.
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Oh yes, Duncan, the poetry IS worth the pain...

the ache can be SO fine...
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alliteration and elipses are good

rhyme is evil

*grin*
quote:
Would it be too much for a hurting heart to conceive,
that the silence's true intent is meant as healing reprieve
probably the lines that ripped me away from you in this and plunged me into my own experiences. i have a feeling that mine are far different and yet the words you chose fit oh so well. many of these lines i have said or heard before - of course in different ways - and i was there throughout.

out of curiosity - what made you choose to bold some of the poem? i have to admit it was kinda distracting. your words and word choices were more than powerful and poetic enough to stand on their own - completely. just a little question.

of course i dig it... *ahem* even if it rhymes (a LOT - look at all that internal rhyming...geez )

hugs mothy-you.

C

ps: alliteration and elipses are good
rhyme is evil
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"What are you so afraid of?" she questioned.

     "Everything," came the reply.

     "You haven't even scratched the surface yet,
you know you have to, and you know the reasons why."

This grabbed on to me like my inner child begging me to try, try again. Wonderful. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

 
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