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0 posted 2002-05-03 02:51 PM



This poem died a sad, subtle death in a different forum. Let's see if it fares any better here...

-By far-
The sun, she swelled up to my size
before she fell to pieces.

The glass tipped over off the table,
spilling petal drops.

Time took hold of moment's hand,
two bird wings in the mirror.

The silver was not light enough
to hold the moon, rain stars.

(A song to wish the verse she wrote
was enough by far)

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Janet Marie
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1 posted 2002-05-03 03:29 PM


Time took hold of moment's hand,
two bird wings in the mirror.

The silver was not light enough

to hold the moon, rain stars.
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I wasnt at that other forum...thats the only thing wrong with the poem *L*


How can one not love this line......

"Time took hold of moment's hand,"

very very cool...very very deep if one really thinks about it.....

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2 posted 2002-05-03 07:37 PM


I can always count on you, Butterfly Slippers. Danke.
Janet Marie
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3 posted 2002-05-03 08:25 PM


tis I who thanks you

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4 posted 2002-05-03 08:54 PM




(big huggsssssss) Oh Michael, I am so sorry this crashed at that other forum and I apologize if I don't always read you, I know how you feel for I have crashed at so many other forums and I truly do enjoy reading your fabulous descriptive style so very much! (sigh) This is filled with sincerity and powerful perspectives, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 2002-05-03 08:58 PM


Butterflies seem attracted to this poem! Fine by me. Thank you both. *bows*
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6 posted 2002-05-03 09:21 PM


beautiful poem and i agree with JM
very deep...lovely writing from your
pen...so sorry it crashed at the other
forum, perhaps the right people weren't
reading it take care.
amy

"you can't stop
the rain
from pouring down
can't stop the
world from turning 'round
can't stop me from
loving you
no matter
what you do"

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7 posted 2002-05-04 08:26 AM


I agree with the others. Your words are soul felt.

Deb

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8 posted 2002-05-06 01:31 PM


Thank you.
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