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bsquirrel
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0 posted 2002-05-02 02:12 PM


Let me have your rain.
I'm thirsty to be filled with day.
Let me have your sun
so heather-cold among these trees.
Let me have your snow.
Blind the sky you want me to watch.
Let me have your sea.
Drown blue in the salt of me.

Let me have your road.
Travel up and back and forth.
Let me have your words.
Sing them through dawn dusking lips.
Let me have your blood.
Time just wants to stain this pen.
Let me have tonight.
We the tremble, cracking glass.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-02-2002 03:04 PM).]

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Martie
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1 posted 2002-05-02 02:17 PM


You get a smile..and some of my sun, but you have that anyway.  Great write!
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2 posted 2002-05-02 02:27 PM


Ohhhh....nice, need I say more ?
Dark Stranger
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3 posted 2002-05-02 02:38 PM


double thumbs up amigo
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4 posted 2002-05-02 02:45 PM


Well done - enjoyed. Chris

Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away.

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5 posted 2002-05-02 02:48 PM


HA, I'll let you have the rain and the snow. But I'll keep my blood, thank you.  
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with you
6 posted 2002-05-02 03:06 PM


I love this....but you know I think your poetry rocks
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7 posted 2002-05-02 03:06 PM


Aw, c'mon Midnitesun. It only hurts a little.

Glad you all enjoyed. And the feeling's mutual, SEA.

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-02-2002 03:08 PM).]

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8 posted 2002-05-02 03:07 PM


Let me have your rain.
I'm thirsty to be filled with day...

I loved these lines...

I came in to cool off and drink..and I got a double bonus of words to thirst upon..

*s

M


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9 posted 2002-05-02 03:29 PM


bsquirrel
Well done as the comments show, enjoyed.

bsquirrel
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10 posted 2002-05-02 05:24 PM


Thanks!
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Deep in the heart
11 posted 2002-05-03 01:12 PM


Only cracking

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12 posted 2002-05-03 01:17 PM


Way cool write Michael.
Enjoyed so much.
~Hugs~

bsquirrel
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13 posted 2002-05-03 02:05 PM


Thanks lots. Always.
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14 posted 2002-05-03 02:06 PM




(smiles) This is such a wonderful heartfelt write, sweet friend, may you find all your heart desires! (big hugggsssss) This is excellent, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Michael, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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15 posted 2002-05-03 02:11 PM


enjoyed
bsquirrel
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16 posted 2002-05-03 07:38 PM


Thank you one and all for reading and enjoyin'.
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