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Ebb and Flow
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Ebb and Flow |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla 
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Ebb and Flow Shadows creeping up a wall Reaching up to nighttimes call. Slowly flowing out in ebb Catching phantoms in the web. Causing me to form a muse Lucid with the coming blues Making clouds into a spell Placing me in wonders dwell. And chariots ride the sky With horses and wings that fly And treasure falls from out the blue Upon a field of dreamers view Replacing yellow daffodil Once to me had grow at will Making lilies hide their heads Now has over grown the beds. It is my way to say good-bye Herein the wile of a sigh |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Seymour darling heart this is utterly beautiful stunningly well written, you know for certain that etched into my soul are the words Seymour is king of rhyme divine and it’s true you surely are. No one paints word pictures with your consummate skill, nobody does it like you. I love the way you layer the scene, build it into a masterpiece, truly exquisite darling boy, you really do make my day. You know I’m going to say I love this utterly don’t you? And of course you know I’m smiling brightly with a satisfied Seymour smile    Love and warm stuff As always Mushy To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Elizabeth Santos Member Rara Avis
since 1999-11-08
Posts 9269Pennsylvania |
Sy I like the ebb and flow of your thoughts. It comes so naturally to a mind such as yours No phantoms that I can see Only the beauty of your words Liz |
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Janet Marie Member Laureate
since 2000-01-22
Posts 18554 |
And chariots ride the sky With horses and wings that fly And treasure falls from out the blue Upon a field of dreamers view Replacing yellow daffodil Once to me had grow at will Making lilies hide their heads Now has over grown the beds. It is my way to say good-bye Herein the wile of a sigh ============================== Stinkylove..its not a phantom...its Randy trying to sneak out while youre sleeping.  Dearest Sy...So many times your tender rhymes that speak of time's immortality and accepting who and where you are in your life's journey touch me..this one is no exception...and those closing couplets make me want to give you a big hug.  We've had a late spring here...the daffodils are still blooming in all their glory...so are you. How else can you explain all the butterflies swarming around you? *winkiewinkie*   love ya Sy-babers mothyme |
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Mistletoe Angel 
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
 : (sigh) This is soooooo beautiful with a tinge of sadness in it, sweet friend, saying goodbye is indeed a hard thing to do, but can also be so touching and captivating and to let them know at least someone will always be in the garden of your thoughts is the best you could ever hope for! (big hugggssssss) This is fabulous as always, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Seymour, thank you for sharing! May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton |
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Greeneyes
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
SY~ I really enjoyed the gentle flow of this....soothing in many ways... Lauren~ ~Sinking fast into |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Marsha, You build me sand castles on the beach Will you also keep the sea from leech? Elizabeth, As JM said it's only Randy Dragon bemoaning his leach. Thank you for your comment. Sy JM, Your so cute I would put you on my birthday cake as a butterfly and yea lets blame Randy Winkiewinkie Stinky. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Noah, Your comments are always a pleasure to read. Luren, Soothing is the word, thank you. |
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HopeS Member Elite
since 2000-12-22
Posts 4596Perth Western Australia |
loved this verse Seymour , because I am a dreamer !!! And chariots ride the sky With horses and wings that fly And treasure falls from out the blue Upon a field of dreamers view Hope |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
HopeS, A lovely pick, thank you for the read and reply. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
the rhythm here is perfect....and the good bye part caught me of guard, and i liked that very much. Nice to see your pic is back |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Thank you sweet sea and may your way be calm and gentle. |
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hoot_owl_rn Member Patricius
since 1999-07-05
Posts 10750Glen Hope, PA USA |
This paints a gentle picture all it's own...lovely |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Ruth, Your the greatest hugger in the world. |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
you have a wonderful muse... M |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Maureen, Thank you for the read and reply. |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
Sy, a pleasure to read this the mystery and the capture well done sir |
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Krissy Senior Member
since 2002-02-22
Posts 556kent England |
Seymour hi there, this is sooooo special, you really are a wonderful writer and this has such a smooth flow and perfect rhyme, you are a divine poet. Excellent writing thank you this is a keeper. You could walk the beach with me Seymour, leave mum building sandcastles, we’ll collect seashells instead. She won’t mind and I’m much more entertaining there mum snaffled from under your nose and done with style, points to me I think   Love and warm stuff As always Krissy And while thy willing soul transpiers |
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Sunshine
Administrator
Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-25
Posts 63354Listening to every heart |
...It is my way to say good-bye Herein the wile of Sy... I don't think so....  |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Beautiful write. |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Dark Stranger, Thank you for the read and well done. Krissy, Seashells sound good, we'll listen to the secrets of the sea. Sunshine, Just taking poetic license. bsquirrel, Thank you for the beautiful. |
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Interloper
since 2000-11-06
Posts 8369Deep in the heart |
Sy, you have written another gem |
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Seymour Tabin Member Empyrean
since 1999-07-07
Posts 31720Tamarac Fla |
Interloper, Thank you and one day I will make a neckless. |
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