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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside 
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I don't want to be here tomorrow in the same place I stood yesterday biting my lip and making adjustments while warming the bench. I'm not cut out for this stuff I'm no heavy hitter you're batting a hundred covering your bases driving another one out. There's no tie to the game no evening the score I'm out of your league tired of chasing foul balls crossing over the line. Flying by night to the left of left field I'm not there anymore I didn't come here to watch a near perfect game you won and I lost and I'm already gone.... [This message has been edited by BluesSerenade (05-02-2002 01:48 AM).] |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Ok Lori, So what does that mean? Hmmmm. Interesting write.  Hope everything is okay.It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
It means I'm a sore loser!! I'm fine really, have to be!!! Thanks Larry~ |
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Larry C
since 2001-09-10
Posts 10286United States |
Whew! It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo! |
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ctowen Member Elite
since 2001-10-18
Posts 2286Green Mountains of VT |
Sounds like the game was over before it started .... perhaps called due to rain? Maybe just a short stop to the big game! I am sure you have covered your own bases and will make it safely home. How about tennis .... I hear its easy to score, and love from the very beginning! |
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Christopher
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Member Rara Avis
since 1999-08-02
Posts 8296Purgatorial Incarceration |
i love it when someone takes an idea and runs it through as a unique metaphor for [their] life. this was cool. Chris |
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nakdthoughts Member Laureate
since 2000-10-29
Posts 19200Between the Lines |
this one was a hit..mybe a homerun Lori.. as always you are able to metaphor any action in life hugsss hope you are fine, I can't seem to get myself aligned with you..but am thinking of you. *S M |
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Dark Stranger Member Patricius
since 2001-03-19
Posts 13631West Coast |
lori.. didn't realize you were so athletically driven enjoyed this view |
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Aimster Member Elite
since 2000-02-19
Posts 4297Charlotte, NC |
lori, this was a really awesome write. loved how you used the metaphor and applied it to a situation in your life...just a really great poem...full of all the emotion and intensity ive come to expect from you. take care. amy "you can't stop |
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bsquirrel
since 2000-01-03
Posts 7855 |
Strike three. I enjoyed that. |
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SEA
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Member Seraphic
since 2000-01-18
Posts 22676with you |
dang it, Mike took my reply  yes, this rocks Bluesy....the anger rings through, and it appears to me......he lost  |
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Nightshade
since 2001-08-31
Posts 13962just out of reach |
Blues - I love the way that this is written. I have felt this way myself at one time....maybe more. Enjoyed. Chris Life is not measured by breaths you take, but by moments that take your breath away. |
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Mistletoe Angel
since 2000-12-17
Posts 32816Portland, Oregon |
(big hugggssssss) Oh Lori, this is so sad but powerful, sweet friend, you haven't lost, for it is all his loss and you have won in the process, just as you have set the par of the course! (sigh) My heart goes out to you, sweet friend, I can sense the frustration in your words, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Lori, thank you for sharing!  May love and light always shine upon you! Love, Noah Eaton "Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..." |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
I'm not cut out for this stuff I'm no heavy hitter you're batting a hundred covering your bases driving another one out. Sometimes, it's not whether you win or lose...but if you leave the game in time. Excellent write! |
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ShadowRider Senior Member
since 2001-07-14
Posts 1038USA |
For your generous gift, in an Emergency, the other day, I thank you. From the bottom of my heart, that was a wonderful caring gesture. It meant the world to me. *s* JkF |
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BluesSerenade Member Patricius
since 2001-10-23
Posts 10549By the Seaside |
Larry~ ctowen~ Thank you for your nice reply, all of them! I'm covering my bases with a tarp for the time being, and brushing up on my tennis skills in the meantime. Christopher~ I think I was milking the metaphor for all it was worth and just being a bad sport in general. I gotta watch that stuff! Thanks~ Maureen~ come sit with me and keep the bench warm I need to remember to put a blanket under my butt, it would sure keep me warmer than the fuse I was trying to light!!! sheesh!! moody me! Hugs Maur~ Dark~ You ain't seen nothing yet!! When I get to the big leagues you can say you knew me when. lol~ betcha can't wait!!! thanks DS~Hi Amy~ Intensity, who me??? I was applying more mood than metaphor. Thank you and hugs dear girl~ Hi bsq~ Hey that was a foul tip, I'm pushing my luck and have yet to strike out, but it's bound to happen if I don't keep my eye on the ball!! Nice to see your name here, thanks~ SEA~ Sometimes it seems like a no win situation, could be I am on the wrong field all together. What's that goal post doing at the other end anyway! Thank you SEAgal~ Chris~ It's good to know I'm not the only odd man out! Thank you very much for being here. Noah~ Just venting and slamming down on my keyboard. You're all heart dear poet, thank you. Hey Duncan~ Thereyougo, it's all about knowing when to leave, and quitting while we're ahead! Makes me feel kind of childish, as if to say, I'm taking my bat and ball and going home now!! Hmmmmmph! Thank you Duncan, you are much too kind. Shadowrider~ Thank you for returning the favor! Now lets play ball and may we both win!! Be well my friend!!! |
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