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Scars, Wars and Liberty
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Scars, Wars and Liberty |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA 
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Under the moon in cast of light so full I stand in love of thee upon the steps of life As waves of blue crash with yon sound of gull My shield I lay in peace, and sheath my knife A weary soul stands wavering and tired from days of ride on hill of crimson flow The bones of men lay ‘pon the green retired as souls depart into the night of glow A war of men to keep the say of words. In name of God and church and liberty The chosen way that speech for all be heard as stone does fall and life is now set free. A war did rage till two of moons did fall as life and limb were lost upon the green The light of day burned red onto the pall of lives now dead in flow of crimson sheen. A scar on flesh, the brand of youth and men Tears of the soul and of the softest skin As proof in life of those who fought, did win Olde ways of love and war and death back then. [This message has been edited by Magnus (05-01-2002 08:12 PM).] |
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Balladeer
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Member Empyrean
since 1999-06-05
Posts 25505Ft. Lauderdale, Fl USA |
Excellent writing, Magnus, and I like the way you used the colors... from days of ride onhill of crimson flow that line particularly is striking...very well done, sir  |
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Duncan Member Ascendant
since 2001-08-07
Posts 5455 |
Your talent is intimidating...excellent write, Barry. |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Michael....thank you...and I fixed the onhill to read on hill.....silly me... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Duncan....I apologize...certainly not meaning to intimidate....and thank you for having enjoyed this... |
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Greeneyes 
since 2000-09-09
Posts 9903In Your Poetic Mind |
Barry~ Very lovely write....always from you...  Lauren~ ~Sinking fast into |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Lauren, as always, a most gracious reply from you.... Thank You! |
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Marsha
since 2000-07-10
Posts 7423Maidstone Kent England |
Magnus darling boy I think this is utterly utterly spectacular. This a truly outstandingly fabulous poem. Such precision of placement, such a fabulous flow and form. You paint the scene darling heart as only you know how to do. You combined the imagery and the sound in perfection in your marvellous and utterly unique way. Truly perfect writing, and I love it. I love it truly you are a master at these poems darling boy, and I love it utterly utterly love it  Love and warm stuff As always Mushy   To give light to them that sit in darkness..... to guide our feet into the way of peace Luke 2:79 |
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Enchantress Member Empyrean
since 2001-08-14
Posts 35113Canada eh. |
Ah Barry~You never cease to amaze me with your writing ability. Love this! *Hugs in White Shoulders* ~Somewhere in my heart I'm always |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Mushy, thank you darling girl. I do love your replies, but you know that already, don't you.... |
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Magnus
since 2001-10-10
Posts 14135South Carolina, USA |
Nancy, Nancy, quite a fancy My, how the shoulders smell so elegant of a fragrance I do so much remember well. Thanx Enchanting one.... |
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