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bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

0 posted 2002-05-01 01:22 PM

Dressed the curtain with her shadow.
Windows undone by her hands.
Letting glass light fall to pieces.
Sadness working through her glands.

Set the pieces burning out.
Fecund shudder of finality.
Bony roses, goodbye glowly.
Colors lit the unlit sky.

Color turned to red-fed hunger.
Color turned to blackly treescape.
Color turned to blue-gold raincloud.
Color turned, not much to say.

Rain is falling on the flames.
She said leave the pictures;
keep the frames.

Decaflame
Senior Member

since 2001-05-11

Posts 1635

1 posted 2002-05-01 01:24 PM

You mind twists
words in ways that
leaves me speechless
at times...

I enjoy reading your work

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

2 posted 2002-05-01 01:30 PM

I felt heaviness while reading...like a weight on the chest. Your ending is awesome in its irony...So tell me, are all of these NEW? Impressive m'friend.

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

3 posted 2002-05-01 02:09 PM

Thanks everyone. And these are all brand-new. A nice day-to-day map of the craziness that is my head.

serenity blaze
Member Empyrean

since 2000-02-02

Posts 27738

4 posted 2002-05-02 08:19 AM

hey...twenty good bumps, deserves another. yer a nut and I love you.

ecrivan
Member Elite

since 2001-12-10

Posts 3923
my own state

5 posted 2002-05-02 08:36 AM

love and its disappointments "in and out of frame"..nicely rendered

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

6 posted 2002-05-02 12:33 PM

Thanks, everyone.

Interloper

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-11-06

Posts 8369
Deep in the heart

7 posted 2002-05-03 09:16 AM

This deserves another go

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

8 posted 2002-05-03 10:39 AM

"Rain is falling on the flames.
She said leave the pictures;
keep the frames."

I LOVE this part....

catalinamoon

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-06-03

Posts 9543
The Shores of Alone

9 posted 2002-05-03 12:07 PM

That was quite a powerful ending.
Sandra

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

10 posted 2002-05-03 02:07 PM

Thanks everyone. And yes, I have a thing for rain.

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

11 posted 2002-05-03 02:41 PM

well then, that makes two of us

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

12 posted 2002-05-03 02:47 PM

I noticed.

Which sometimes makes me wonder why I moved to a part of the country where there's *so little* rain. Hmm...

SEA

Moderator

Member Seraphic

since 2000-01-18

Posts 22676
with you

13 posted 2002-05-03 05:55 PM

even up in NorCal there isn't enough rain for me...*sigh*

maybe someday we'll both end up in Washington lol

bsquirrel

Member Rara Avis

since 2000-01-03

Posts 7855

14 posted 2002-05-03 06:12 PM

Seattle would be fun, actually. It's got an underground city!

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