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Dark Stranger
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0 posted 05-01-2002 05:20 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to Submit your Poem to Passions  View IP for Dark Stranger

the highway thinks she is you in the mornings
when she nuzzles up close
when I am mountains behind her
and she fits my welcome
while we watch the sun together

I lean over her as if she were you
and make shadows over her eyes
she turns up around my corners
and fits to my mouth edge smile
I cover her shoulders there

the highway thinks she is you in the evenings
when she turns to face me
when I am mountains in front of her
and she welcomes my fit
while she watches the moon above me

I lean over her as if she were you
and touch the shadows in her eyes
she reaches up under my rising
and fits to my edges
she covers my shoulders there

with her never lonely sighs

ęDark
  

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Sunshine
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1 posted 05-01-2002 07:16 AM       View Profile for Sunshine   Email Sunshine   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Sunshine's Home Page   View IP for Sunshine


This brought to memory a specific road in CA that I had occasion to travel a few times...it also brought back the sun run rise and the sun run set in specific areas of the topography...

smiling here...
Dark Stranger
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2 posted 05-01-2002 07:21 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

sunshine...thanks for the smile
and Good Morning...glad it made nice memory places
Janet Marie
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3 posted 05-01-2002 08:16 AM       View Profile for Janet Marie   Email Janet Marie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Janet Marie

the highway thinks she is you in the mornings
when she nuzzles up close
when I am mountains behind her
and she fits my welcome
while we watch the sun together

I lean over her as if she were you
and make shadows over her eyes
she turns up around my corners
and fits to my mouth edge smile
I cover her shoulders there

================================
and she welcomes my fit
while she watches the moon above me

I lean over her as if she were you
and touch the shadows in her eyes
she reaches up under my rising
and fits to my edges
she covers my shoulders there

with her never lonely sighs

======================================

*shaking my head and smiling*
Is there a metaphor, analogy or image that you dont make sigh?
I dont think so!!  
Love the the personification in this DS..
most of all, the contenment found in this kind of closeness that it brings to mind.
very cool write poet sir.
jm

... and I don't know why ...
Why should love come down and just sweep me away
I want to fly ... but there are so many things in my way.

J Browne

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4 posted 05-01-2002 08:25 AM       View Profile for Mistletoe Angel   Email Mistletoe Angel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Mistletoe Angel's Home Page   View IP for Mistletoe Angel



(smiles) This is absolutely wonderful, sweet friend, I too loved the personification in this poem, almost as though its a message of faith and trust, being the mountains to always watch over her and guide her with love, and the way you used a serpentine effect in the structure of the stanzas! (big hugggssssss) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet friend, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

"Underneath your clothes there's an endless story..."

Shakira

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5 posted 05-01-2002 08:31 AM       View Profile for Enchantress   Email Enchantress   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Enchantress

Dark~
I'll take the high road...
while Nightshade takes the low road..
and we'll meet you at the edge of your smile.

Thank you for the awesome morning read
from the both of us.
~Double Hugs& Grins~
Dark Stranger
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6 posted 05-01-2002 08:46 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

janet marie, thank you hon...I appreciate you for the reviews.

noah, thank you my friend, it was a fun write

enchantress and nightshade, mmmmmm sitting in the middle between you both would be such a treat..thank you both
Martie
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7 posted 05-01-2002 10:56 AM       View Profile for Martie   Email Martie   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit Martie's Home Page   View IP for Martie

This puts a whole new sweet meaning into driving.   I enjoy what you see.
Dark Stranger
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8 posted 05-01-2002 11:12 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

ms martie, thanks lady friend...I appreciate you
Interloper
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Deep in the heart


9 posted 05-01-2002 11:15 AM       View Profile for Interloper   Email Interloper   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Interloper

Wow.  I love this.  More, please
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10 posted 05-01-2002 11:17 AM       View Profile for serenity blaze   Email serenity blaze   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for serenity blaze

and a good morning it is...I loved the very continuity written here, familiar and soothing...a very good fit, indeed. Good to see ya (methinks I have recovered--chuckle--time to do it again? )
Dark Stranger
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11 posted 05-01-2002 12:01 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

interloper...thank you for the read and smile,

serenity, was wondering how long it would take before you were ready for another round..(grin)

thanks for the read ms
Decaflame
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12 posted 05-01-2002 12:55 PM       View Profile for Decaflame   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Decaflame


shadows steep
last of sun's ring
against eyelids closed

and the highway
still feels
the warm
Dark Stranger
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13 posted 05-01-2002 12:58 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

deca..mmmmm I like that thank you for
your smoothing steps
Seymour Tabin
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14 posted 05-01-2002 01:05 PM       View Profile for Seymour Tabin   Email Seymour Tabin   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Seymour Tabin

Dark Stranger
You have your own way of saying things and I always enjoy the read.
nakdthoughts
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Between the Lines


15 posted 05-01-2002 01:07 PM       View Profile for nakdthoughts   Email nakdthoughts   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for nakdthoughts

and she fits my welcome


hmmm...I use to think I could do without morning welcomes like this..but they are a treat to read.

hugs
M
Dark Stranger
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sy, humble thanks my friend, enjoy your reviews sir

nt, thank you and am glad you enjoy the offering.  hugs back ms
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17 posted 05-01-2002 02:15 PM       View Profile for bsquirrel   Email bsquirrel   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for bsquirrel

Yr a true poet.
Indigo
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18 posted 05-01-2002 05:04 PM       View Profile for Indigo   Email Indigo   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Indigo

your path's untroubled
when familiar curves beckon
to welcome you home

Indigo


Dark Stranger
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19 posted 05-01-2002 05:37 PM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

bsq, thank you my friend

ms indigo,
curves of familiar
never familiar
to new day eyes

thanks lady
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20 posted 05-01-2002 05:56 PM       View Profile for snowpants   Email snowpants   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems   Click to visit snowpants's Home Page   View IP for snowpants

'I lean over her as if she were you
and make shadows over her eyes
she turns up around my corners
and fits to my mouth edge smile
I cover her shoulders there

the highway thinks she is you in the evenings
when she turns to face me
when I am mountains in front of her
and she welcomes my fit
while she watches the moon above me'

I haven't read a thing of yours yet that doesn't amaze me...excellently written!

sp        

I've been down this road forever,
and the time has come to circle back home...

Duncan
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21 posted 05-01-2002 06:13 PM       View Profile for Duncan   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Duncan

A moth recently turned me on to your poetry, I'm going to have to remember to thank her!
rwood
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22 posted 05-01-2002 09:21 PM       View Profile for rwood   Email rwood   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for rwood

Everyday..please..

Sincerely,
Reg
Severn
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Sigh (you know the kind).

This reminds me of someone in particular, at a certain time. Brought it all back quite clearly. I really appreciate this...I really do.

K
Dark Stranger
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24 posted 05-02-2002 05:26 AM       View Profile for Dark Stranger   Email Dark Stranger   Edit/Delete Message      Find Poems  View IP for Dark Stranger

snowpants, humble thanks my friend

duncan, thank you for the comments, and thank the moth for me too

regina, always and then more too, thanks

severn, it pleases me to make a memory come back to you, thanks much

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