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Christopher
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0 posted 2002-04-30 05:32 PM



Just a ramble, nothing more.

C


Anticipation
©2002 C.G. Ward



if I were to take a swing
at the imagery of Anticipation:
I’d have to write a book,
The Book.
or, perhaps even a poem…
maybe take pictures of a child
pressing her clean forehead to glass windows
where potential awaits a smile in the form
of red ribbons and silk wrapping.

maroon – to change the past,
one must first ignore the future;
take two pills of apathy,
and call me when you’ve
grown out of your innocence.

more though,
it would be a swirl of colours
glancing through the impatience of…
     something.
I forget just what right now.
could be that it’s ablaze in my eyes -
bleeding embers like the chase of
words around a virtual board of
congregating intellectual wannabes.

grey – when nighttime beckons
on the periphery of fornication, where
angels and demons dissolve
into a conundrum of intoxicating acronyms,
laughing at the pain of separation
from a deity who no longer exists.

what’s that song you liked so much?
remember? the one by that guy
in that one band,
you know – the one,
who looks a lot like someone
that used to be important.
oh yeah, he died last year didn’t he?
     too bad,
I might have liked the sentiment
If I could have understood the words.

blue – perfect eyes seeking a perfection
that exists only between pages 122 and 124
of a novel that’s half fiction, half desire,
and all-encompassing in its arrogance;
if one were to presume assumption,
that singer would have fit flawlessly
in this nightmare.
but, after the preceding chapter,
because pain before love would seem…
redundant.

green – once more, to challenge the might
of a titan,
he rendered her mute with the emotions of
a thousand-year search… from the wrong side
of the world, and the opposite end
of maturity.

see, I remember when I first decided,
and you suggested
a remedy for involvement –
a chase and chaste participation;
the heady eddy of self-deprecation
billowing in the cast of an artist’s vision.
I remember,
but I don’t recall…
the anticipation
is still too bright.


[This message has been edited by Christopher (04-30-2002 05:36 PM).]

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1 posted 2002-04-30 05:37 PM


Sounds like keen anticipation to me

Jamie
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2 posted 2002-04-30 06:47 PM


you should ramble more often

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3 posted 2002-04-30 07:31 PM



A most concise ramble it is...
you should let go a little more often

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4 posted 2002-04-30 10:15 PM


Christopher~

this is a striking revelation
a book, a poem of colors
in every brightness they represent
but is it the anticipation you are seeking
or the true colors they, themselves
form? so very well written
leaves much for the imagination
to explore….well done sir….


Lauren~

~Sinking fast into
an ocean of you,
what if I told you,
what if I said
that I love you
do we dare cross
that line between your
heart and mine~

KimW
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5 posted 2002-04-30 10:24 PM


I like your ramble and agree with others that you should do that more often!
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6 posted 2002-05-01 11:47 AM


This is very intimate--a look inside your head...I too, like your rambling very much. I do anticipate more!

This could be a SERIES..<---hint & hugs

Janet Marie
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7 posted 2002-05-01 12:13 PM


or, perhaps even a poem
maybe take pictures of a child
pressing her clean forehead to glass windows
where potential awaits a smile in the form
of red ribbons and silk wrapping.


maroon  to change the past,
one must first ignore the future;
take two pills of apathy,
and call me when you've
grown out of your innocence.


more though,
it would be a swirl of colours
glancing through the impatience of
     something.
I forget just what right now.
==========================
grey when nighttime beckons
on the periphery of fornication, where
angels and demons dissolve
into a conundrum of intoxicating acronyms,
laughing at the pain of separation
from a deity who no longer exists.

===============================
blue  perfect eyes seeking a perfection
that exists only between pages 122 and 124
of a novel that's half fiction, half desire,

and all-encompassing in its arrogance;
if one were to presume assumption,
that singer would have fit flawlessly
in this nightmare.
but, after the preceding chapter,
because pain before love would seem
redundant.

==========================

much more than a ramble poet sir...
interesting and clever analogy of color and emotion... and I greatly enjoyed the references to poetry and writing...
also striking was the image and metaphor of the child at the window..it encompassed so many things.
And as always your vocabulary and language mastery is impressive.
yeah...much more than a ramble.....


So? would ya humor me and write one in rhyme (ask Karen for a vial) hehe
later-poet-gator
mothyme

... and I don't know why ...
Why should love come down and just sweep me away
I want to fly ... but there are so many things in my way.

J Browne

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8 posted 2002-05-01 12:42 PM


I too, enjoyed the image of the child at the window and also the thoughts inspired in my mind...by your words.
*s
M

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9 posted 2002-05-01 03:16 PM



Hmm..you HAVE to be joking me! EIGHT replies? DAMN! This goes back up as long as I'm around!

This took my thoughts all over. Each path change was smooth like I never ventured off the first. Was it meant to take me in a lot of directions? **shrugs** I don't know. I do know that there is really no way I can express to you how much I LOVED this. My favorite part (and choosing was difficult)

"green – once more, to challenge the might
of a titan,
he rendered her mute with the emotions of
a thousand-year search… from the wrong side
of the world, and the opposite end
of maturity."


Yep. I'm glad you're writing here again.

*Jenn*

How grave is my condition, for I cannot find the words to say, I need you so.
~Sarah MacLachlan~

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10 posted 2002-05-01 04:06 PM


*Anticipating your next set of ramblings dearest...this was all and everything!!

Open arms can be the most fragile in the world...



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11 posted 2002-05-01 06:07 PM


You know hon, this reminds me of an unframed picture I have...(it's ridiculously Post Modern too heh)..called Televentre by Victor Brauner (unframed cause I can't afford it yet ~rolling eyes~). It's a collection, a medley, a motley of ideas, thoughts encompassing a 'theme' yet it doesn't seem to wind itself up, to end. Classic PM - mucking with the ideas of beginning, middle and end. The more you look/read, the more you see. This is NOT all over the place...absolutely not. Maybe it could do with tightening, but that's about it - yeah, do what Karen said - more like this...series or not. Ok? You have your orders Sir...oops, did I say the wrong thing?

I still can't believe you put 'perfect' and 'blue eyes' together..snicker. What were you thinking? Oh, more delusions, right...

Bits I love, even though it's almost dangerous to separate bits of this out, I still will:

maybe take pictures of a child
pressing her clean forehead to glass windows
where potential awaits a smile in the form
of red ribbons and silk wrapping.

I forget just what right now.
could be that it’s ablaze in my eyes -
bleeding embers like the chase of
words around a virtual board of
congregating intellectual wannabes

what’s that song you liked so much?
remember? the one by that guy
in that one band,
you know – the one,
who looks a lot like someone
that used to be important.
oh yeah, he died last year didn’t he?
     too bad,
I might have liked the sentiment
If I could have understood the words.
(this segment is utterly publishable...hmmm...there are some great PM poets who write just like that, pity I can't remember their names right now).

green – once more, to challenge the might
of a titan,
he rendered her mute with the emotions of
a thousand-year search… from the wrong side
of the world, and the opposite end
of maturity.

I remember,
but I don’t recall…
the anticipation
is still too bright.

Great ending huh? The whole is one damn fine poem.

I could say you rock C, but I can't because after all, I do. EEEEHEEEEEEEEHEEEEEE...

hugs you

K

[This message has been edited by Severn (05-01-2002 06:08 PM).]

Elizabeth Cor
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12 posted 2002-05-01 06:20 PM


I like:

a child
pressing her clean forehead to glass windows
where potential awaits a smile in the form
of red ribbons and silk wrapping.

bleeding embers like the chase of
words around a virtual board of
congregating intellectual wannabes.
(heh)

into a conundrum of intoxicating acronyms
(heh, again, and sigh… but for something I may not know),
laughing at the pain of separation
from a deity who no longer exists.

because pain before love would seem…
redundant.

Overall, confusing… and rambling, but not really in a good way…
Some great lines (as seen above), but you can do better, much…

Oh, and…

blue – perfect eyes seeking a perfection

if you care to? An lbl by e-mail would be lovely… or just a brush up on the subject matter…

~smile~ wonderful to see (know) you’re writing again… hugs

Elizabeth Cor
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13 posted 2002-05-01 06:23 PM


Ahh... got here just before me... notice the equivalent shaking head to your blue eyes?
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14 posted 2002-05-01 06:58 PM


See??? SEE???

It just doesn't work C.

Meg - ain't he a twit? You don't agree that this is rambling in a good way? Do you need an intro to Post Modern too?

K

[This message has been edited by Severn (05-01-2002 07:01 PM).]

Christopher
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15 posted 2002-05-02 02:58 AM


i should be in bed, but since i can't sleep, i thought i'd take the opportunity to reply to these wonderful comments.

Interloper - it is and can be, or maybe it's not and shouldn't be. either way works for me!

Jamie - i take that as a good thing (because it's far too bruising to my ego elsewise) so thanks!

Big K - (heh) i am amazed that you would use concise in regard to this wandering. thank you, i have and will do so.

Lauren - if i can take monochrome (kinda lol) letters and show you color, then i have done far more than i had hoped. as to your question (a good one at that), is there really a difference in the end? if anticipation is the sum of the colors, then if you're looking for the colors and you get anticipation (lol) you are still winning, right? thank you kind lady.

Kim - Thank you as well.

Midi-K - inimate is the goal, but so is misdirection... either way, if i make you think, i made you think. as to series... well, depends on how you label it, but you've already seen the next one. tell me if you think it fits.

Moth Woman - not a chance! no rhyme, as rhyme is EVIL! heh. i do, however, thank you profusely for your continued support of these feeble attempts at being clever!

M - thoughts are good, and thank you. it's interesting that so many like what i worried was the weakest portion of my 'ramble' thank you for appreciating it.

Jenn - you get what you get and that's good enough for me. as long as someone reads it, i dont' care how they interpret it. it's the READING that's important to me, not the understanding.

T - clever girl. thanks mama

K - thank you sincerely for the extended reply and partial critique. we'll go more into this later, okies? as to the blue eyes - well, i just say you're jealous!

M - i find it interesting (as i mentioend earlier) that you found this as confusing as you did, though i think point of reference has a lt to do with it. expectations (not negative in any way) can direct the course of any poem (bashing your brains into a typewriter for example hahahah). than kyou for the honesty, and we'll do the LBL sometime soon maybe.

peace,

C

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16 posted 2002-05-02 07:36 PM


blue – perfect eyes seeking a perfection
that exists only between pages 122 and 124
of a novel that’s half fiction, half desire,
and all-encompassing in its arrogance;
if one were to presume assumption,
that singer would have fit flawlessly
in this nightmare.
but, after the preceding chapter,
because pain before love would seem…
redundant.

Damn fine ramble, Christopher.  I could ask for lessons.  

rwood
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17 posted 2002-05-02 08:32 PM


grey – when nighttime beckons
on the periphery of fornication, where
angels and demons dissolve
into a conundrum of intoxicating acronyms,
laughing at the pain of separation
from a deity who no longer exists.


Okay..the whole piece reads like a fantastic enigma to me..but I felt this one and it was large and I loved it and so forth and so on..It rambled right into my thoughts just perfectly! I so enjoy a good ramble. I anticipate more please.

Sincerely,
Reg


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18 posted 2002-05-03 01:30 PM


duncan - you could ask, and i'll tell you what i've told anyone else who asks - just write what you think, write what you feel, and practice. a million words or so, and i'm BOUND to write something decent here and there.

reg - thank you kind lady for the sincere replies. still - soft, warm. appreciated.

peace,

C

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19 posted 2002-05-05 01:52 AM


C, anticipation is one of the most beautifully mysterious words of all time. Your ramble allowed us to roam freely around in your thoughts, if only for a brief moment, tempting and teasing a bit, leaving us in.....anticipation. Well done!
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20 posted 2002-05-05 02:35 AM


a neat display of poetic definitions to an artistic palette of life..those colours take on new meaning here


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21 posted 2002-05-05 09:00 AM


words in brilliance
in mind, and thinking shine
they are there for the taking
ripened fruit on your vine.

love to read these type of deep thoughts
and careful composition.
Extremely well done, Christopher.
Major attaboys from tSR

Christopher
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22 posted 2002-05-06 01:43 AM


Midnitesun - agreed! LOVE the word... the sound, the usage... just not always the actuality! thank you for your comments and reflections!

ecrivian - artistic pallette of life - i like that. thank you for the reference.

ShadowRider - thank you very much for the 'attaboys!' *grin*

Chris

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