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kaile
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0 posted 2002-04-29 01:40 PM


Paladin's challenge:
"You never really die if you are remembered"

We were seven, self-centred rascals
who thought we knew all about the world,
as yet untraumatised by the fact that
Singapore is a mere dot on the world map

We disliked each other
Maybe it was because
i was from Venus and you were from Mars
Maybe it was because
we were upright fellows,
determined to prove
how arrogantly self-righteous
the other could be

Anyway, we argued a whole lot,
despite that your mum
was around with your school bag and kid brother
You couldn't even carry your own bag
but you always held your own with me
and granted me a good row

And then you left school suddenly
A seven-year-old's memory is short
I missed you for a bit
but then moved on to conquer my world

I was twelve when i heard
you had died of leukaemia
I am sorry that
you never grew up to realise
how small your country is

© Copyright 2002 heng kaile - All Rights Reserved
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1 posted 2002-04-29 01:47 PM


The memory of your friend then lives on, it's a pity that lives can be so short..and they are short in general well written


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2 posted 2002-04-29 01:49 PM


faterider,
Nice tribute in the acknowledgement of childhood naivete.

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3 posted 2002-04-29 03:13 PM


I like the feeling of this faterider. . . it has that quality of "memories sped-up". . .you remember, and then, you fast forward to now. . . and give the reality. . .

well done. . .

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4 posted 2002-04-29 03:13 PM


You proved the theory   Well done.
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5 posted 2002-04-29 04:22 PM


How long does it take to build a lasting memory?I have had memorys built in a flash,Just a glance when two eyes meet.

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6 posted 2002-04-29 10:18 PM




(big hugggsssssss) This is such a powerful and sincere reply to the challenge, sweet friend, I have missed reading your wonderful words so much, I hope all is well with you! (sigh) This is fabulous, sweet friend, we all love you so much! You have such a beautiful heart, sweet Heng, thank you for sharing!



May love and light always shine upon you!

Love,
Noah Eaton

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7 posted 2002-04-29 10:38 PM


What a tender memory write. How wonderful for you to keep this memory of your friend alive.  
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8 posted 2002-04-29 10:46 PM


ecrivan, you just echoed my sentiments...i used to wonder that if i had known she was so sick, i might just get off my high house and be a tad nicer to her

larry,
i sure didn't think i was naive back then....anyway, i think it's a good thing to acknowledge that you were naive once..it shows that you are continually growing, for better or for worse

John,
thanks for your reply...i did what i had to do because i didn't really have much to go on, did i?(i only knew her for a few months, i think) hence, the fast forwarding to now...heeheee

Interloper,
thank you for your reply...She lives on in my heart and i hope never to forget her

Paladin,
Ditto your poetic reply...i wish you can turn that into a poem yourself..anyway, i have been searching for your poem in which you listed out this challenge but to no avail..i would like to read and respond to your poem too

Noah,
thanks..it's nice to know you have been missed, especially when Passions is such a big place these days..Big hugs back

thanx all for reading

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9 posted 2002-04-29 10:52 PM


Kacy,
thank you for your poem and for paladin's challenge...it made me think of her...read my comment to ecrivan..i think that's mainly the reason why i still remember...

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10 posted 2002-04-30 04:47 PM


Had to read some of your comments to determine if this were a true memory for it sounded so much to be. It's well done, very well done, really.

We all wonder what we'd have done if we'd have known then what we know now.

Whether on the shoal or on the shore,
I'll seek the lighthouse evermore.

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11 posted 2002-05-01 02:01 AM


Hi VAS,

yup, this is a true story..thanks for reading and for your "well done"...

i wonder if it's a good thing to look back into the past..hmmm

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