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KimW
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0 posted 2002-04-27 01:58 AM


Keen eyes see the billowing
elephants marching.
In one swift breeze,
the white-powdered mold
takes new shape -
forming a face.

(c) Kdw, 2000-2002



© Copyright 2002 KimW - All Rights Reserved
Larry C
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1 posted 2002-04-27 02:12 AM


Okay Kim,
Maybe I'm too drugged after surgery...I don't get it! Help me out here.

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

BluesSerenade
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2 posted 2002-04-28 12:18 PM


My take is that you are talking about the changing formations in the clouds, and how we interpret them in our minds eye.

Interesting~

Christopher
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3 posted 2002-04-28 02:20 AM


interesting - my take is that of a sculptor with an image in [her] mind as hands hit the plaster to form the visage of an elephant. either way, good grouping.
nakdthoughts
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4 posted 2002-04-28 04:12 AM


yes.... I see it too *s
M

KimW
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5 posted 2002-04-28 12:46 PM


I'm having fun reading each of your interpretations and find them quite interesting

Blues - You "see" it. It is clouds as they move and take interesting shapes.. I always found it fun (as a child - alright, alright even now..) to find a image within them.

Thanks for reading!

Jonas
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6 posted 2002-04-28 09:14 PM


Geez.......had to go 4 pages down to find this.

I love the imagery in this piece. Reminds me of my childhood when I could see anything my mind could imagine in a cloud formation.

Another thing....there are elements in this poem that could be incorporated into a great haiku.

KimW
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7 posted 2002-04-29 12:08 PM


Jonas - Thank you for finding this, reading it - and pointing out the possibility to "play" with the lines and words a bit and turn it into a haiku. :0)

I think I can, I think I can, I think I can...

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8 posted 2002-04-29 01:46 AM


Kim,
Thanks for the help. ROTFLMBO I did that clear into adulthood. But I was...oh never mind. I'll be better when I'm through drugging the pain. LOL

It's never too late to have a good childhood! Woohoo!

KimW
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9 posted 2002-04-30 10:17 PM


Larry - When you are through drugging the pain, eh? I hope that does not last long.

Oh come on!! Don't leave me wondering what you were going to say! ; )

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10 posted 2002-05-02 03:44 PM


Calling clouds white-powdered mold, huh? No wonder I've been sneezing.  

[This message has been edited by bsquirrel (05-02-2002 03:44 PM).]

Christopher
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11 posted 2002-05-02 03:46 PM


FYI - i wasn't suggesting that the other interpretations were wrong (which apparently they weren't!) just that one can gather more from it.

Chris

KimW
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12 posted 2002-05-02 11:44 PM


bsquirrel - I'm smiling at ya! Hey, poectic license, right? ; )

Chris - I know and found your interpretation very special

Sometimes I enjoy seeing / reading different interpretations - it makes writing and reading more interesting. *smile*

Thanks again for your replies!


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13 posted 2002-05-03 01:16 PM


Gee, I thought it was a rabbit changing into an owl

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